Before You Collapse..

Before You Collapse..
When I first saw you
All I seen was
Broken all over
I’m trying to understand
Why you’re the way you are
Because I’m not the one
Who will change what’s inside
That’s all up to you..
But let me tell you this
Your breaking my heart
Seeing you do the things you do
And what hurts the most is
Whatever I say, you won’t listen..
I wish things could be different
Your only 14 and you have your whole life ahead
Why kiss it goodbye?..
Grab a hold of yourself
And really think about all this
Before you collapse..
If you do, will be the day I will too..

Reviews

[Cait O'Shei]

great! I like the feeling! Remember subject verb agreement!

[liquid_eyes_101]

This is a nice poem. Very thought provoking but i think that the one thing that could have made it better is if you gave more of a hint as to what is wrong with the person your trying to save.