Falling

A poem of mixed feelings. Starts off me being confused at what I want in life and just lost.. Then in the end I write about the place I call my home and the people I had to say goodbye to.. That is what I am missing.. And there is no way I can ever go bac

 

 

Falling

I let the hot water from the shower

Run down my sore body

The heat melts into my heart

I get close to the wall

And just lay my head against it

I fold my arms and I begin to cry

Its like I forgot who I am

And how to feel

And what I want..

I got dreams

Where do I start?

You are talking to me again

Do I just run away this time?

I got a job

But is it really for me?

I have a passion to write

How do I explain that to you?

I have trouble trusting

How do I let anyone in again?

My life is sinking

What is it I need to keep it floating?

I don’t know which path is mine

What way do I take?

I am so lost

How do I find who I am?

I miss you all so much

How am I going make it without you?..

I turn off the water

And I wrap a towel around my broken body

I stand in front of the mirror

Staring at the person I thought I knew

Tears dripping from my eyes

All I saw in my reflection is fear

And me standing all alone

Scared and hopeless

Why did my life have to change?

It was all taken from me

And out of my control..

I look deep inside me

And see that I am missing something

I am missing my home..

Reviews

[Larissa G.]

Most of it is wonderful, filled with emotion and flowing well...except for one line.
"I got dreams" - It's too short and abrupt for me, it feels like it was missing a syllable or two.
Overall, very nice and to me the proof that writing can be therapy when getting emotions out of oneself.
Keep writing.

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

I like this because its transparent, also in the beginning how you took the time to be descriptive.
I enjoyed reading!

[laceyjane23]

very good poem! it flows very well, and i can kind of relate to it, maybe not the same way that you do but none the less i understand what you are saying. keep on writing!
laceyjane

[Calvspw]

ugh I wrote you a really long and helpful review but the site crashed on me and did not send it I am sorry, next time I guess I should copy everything I write before I hit submit review in case it does it again

[JadedSparrow]

My heart began to ache as I read this poem. Any work that can reach out and grab you like this one did is worth praise. I almost wanted to come find you and embrace your pain as my own. Please continue your work...

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Missing is such a big enormous emptyness. I relate. But just remember its a passing moment,

---mishel

[T]

I love the way you write, sweetie! Your heart and soul goes into your writing allowing the reader to feel your emotions. You're stronger than you realize darlin' ... hugs

[Adela Muresan]

How sweet� even if it is very sad.
Your torment is vividly expressed, and I like the unusual ambient you chose for reflecting sadness.

A.M.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very sad poem written from your heart. My prayers to you. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[thibodeaux]

iam here for you!!!
forever and always!!

you are my anker
dont leave me or i will sink with you!!!