My Path

Idk what I want.. And my heart wont chose the path that I need to take before I make the biggest mistake of my life....

What way do I walk

Left or right

Or do I just turn back

And run far away from this

I feel like I am tied up to a post

I’m struggling so hard to get free

My body is bruised

And my heart is damaged

The rope that is tied around me and becomes tighter

It will never get loose

And it won’t stop raining from my eyes

Someone cut the rope and point the direction for me

What way

I let my hair fall down my face

As I look to the ground

I slowly lift my head back up

I look at the sky

And I breathe

I whisper softly

“Where is my heart”?

?

 

My Path

Reviews

[Lil' Poet]

WOW! I love this poem, it's like it was so meaningful when you wrote, it'e very deep and sensitive. I think it was a great idea, keep it up!

Lil' poet!

[W.Piggy]

WOAH. THAT IS SO NICE. I think sometimes i feel just like that, and the poem sounds very deep and painful. But it is really good, and the way you say everything is wonderful. I love the last line, great way to end this poem. Keep it up.

W.Piggy
Definitely going into my favorites.

[thibodeaux]

thats how i feel right now excactly how i feel right now!!!!

[Larissa G.]

Wow. It gets pretty powerful near the end. :)
I have a couple things. The line
"And it won't stop raining from my eyes"
I really would have liked to see something a bit...I don't know. I kinda want to say, more mature, just because the poem ends on such a high note. Don't be offended. :) Like, maybe say:

"And the impending forecast
Is swift rains falling from my eyelashes"

Something like that. I don't know.
Also, maybe one line between the roads and the pole? Because it's a sudden jump between scenes, even though it makes sense by the end it really doesn't at first.

But like I said - I overall loved this poem. Thank you for sharing. :) And as always, keep writing and exploring topics to use. :)

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very nicely done. Well written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[T]

Wonderfully written! You are having a difficult time deciding, it's clear that you are unsure, possibly even afraid of making a wrong decision. I would take more time to think it through and not rush into anything until I was absolutely sure. Then again there are the risk takers, you won't know until you try. Whatever decision you make, I hope it's the right one for you ... Take care and Good luck ... hugs

[Sapphire Balasquez]

i really like this piece!! it's well written and the imagery is beautiful, taking you in-depth to how it feels to be staring at a path. you could even elaborate a little more on the paths itself though, it started to become all about hanigng there, but whatever you think, it's your choice, your poem. well done ^^