America, the Bane

This is basically an edit from a classic poem I wrote entitled "Descending America" which can be found on here as well. Hope you enjoy!

We’re digging our way to Hell,

Our submissive souls we sell.

We swallow the black pill,

Our forsaken fetus we kill.

Kids hanging themselves from a rope,

Minds altered with bountiful dope.

Kids with scars that cover their arm,

Nightly active in their loathsome harm.

Everything we hear is true,

Everyone wants to be just like you.

We reenact what we see on TV,

Waking from a coma with an IV.

Making people forever silent,

Acquiescing to the violent.

Author's Note

In no way am I disrespecting America, I feel honored to live in a free country and be given the opportunities I have here. These problems expand globally, and is not just exclusive to American society.

Reviews

[Belle]

I really like this (I voted for it in the Just Poetry comp. for HHN!). It's honest, it's brutal and it hits the reader hard. I understand that you mean no disrespect, and that's extremely noble of you, but I think it's important to be able to comment on and criticise society for its problems. It's especially hard if you're patriotic - if you are, then twice the kudos for writing this! It's fantastic and your use of language is deeply emotive.

[Luna Zerimar]

You and I have one different opinion.

You like America. I don't. And I live in it.

No offense. Just stating. I totally respect you for liking America.

I mean, it's not all bad.

"Kids hanging themselves from a rope,
Minds altered with bountiful dope.
Kids with scars that cover their arm,
Nightly active in their loathsome harm.
Everything we hear is true,
Everyone wants to be just like you.
We reenact what we see on TV,"

Loved those lines. You've got me just saying "amen".

Amazing write dude.

[SinnerInspired]

I love the realism& truth you put into it. Very realistic& scary. To kno that this is the world we live in. Very talented& I hope to read more of your poetry. Keep up the work.