sadness

sadness is all i know my sweet laugh is gone my loving smile has faded. tears hit the windowsill the sun hides behind the clouds just like my smile hides behind my tears. i have only memories the good , the bad. my smile will return in the end i look around but i don't see the darkness of death i see the brightness of my life past  

Author's Note

spelling and is the worst and this is just first time thing since I'm new so go easy on me and trust me all my stories isn't like this promise.

Reviews

[maurice_forgets]

Hi OnyxWolf,

You know, not every piece of effective poetry is meant to carve its meaning through taut, formal structure and clean scansion. Now, I think it's nice to know about these things before you violate them wholesale; but if poetry is anything it's the defiance of language and convention in service of something higher: chasing after the small, rare truth of a thing that can't be gotten at any other way, maybe. Only you can decide; only you know how credible it is for you as a writer to swipe away accepted conventions of English in favor of the slap-dash, the stylistic and the stream-of-thought.

Writing is a wonderful, maddening dance; first with yourself, then with your reader.

Cheers!

mf

[Siren]

this is great, i really like it. It keeps up hope, through sadness, Great job! :D