Just me and you.

Ugly looking eyes and ugly looking nose

 

Ugly looking arms as windy as a hose.

 

Hair that curls like it saw a ghost

 

No wonder at these parties, I'm never the host.

 

Skin that would break a brick if it could

 

And teeth the colour of old dried wood.

 

But wait hold on, a light is nearing

 

A change in my appearance, well that I'm not fearing.

 

A little water here and a hot iron there

 

A little bit o' make-up and I'm a maiden fair.

 

With hair so silky, and skin so smooth

 

I could do anything, a child I caould soothe.

 

Now I can face the world all pretty and new,

 

And maybe it'll get better, when it's me and you.

 

 

Author's Note

This was like 'POP!" and I wrote it down. Enjoy

Reviews

[Anima Inspired]

Interesting write...I like the way that the voice in the poem seems to be recalling her own outward appearance and then transforming with the possibility of someone loving her for who she truly is. I guess I see the beginning as the self concious, inward view that many of us have which tends to be a little "shaded", and the ending is the finding of someone who actually cares about the inside as well as the outside. Nicely written...

One mistake I found: a child I caould soothe (could)

[Kiara]

an enjoyable piece that shows transformation of someones appearence into finding themselves within as well as that someone that will always love them for who they are.........nice work : )

[THE LOST ROSE]

Pop goes the poem. I enjoyed this pop. The ending was catchy. I like how you build up the flow of this poem. I look forward to enjoying some more of your poetry. When you get a chance come check me out. Espically "The Fragrance of Love"

[Paladin4life]

I enjoyed the piece. I think many of us can relate to the feeling that our external visage does not always do justice to what lies within. I would love to hear more about the relationship mentioned at the end of the poem. It sounds like the speaker already had a mate but felt that now their relationship would be stronger due to the transformation. Is that what you intended to convey. If so that is a wonderful glimps into the human mind in that evemn if someone loves us faults and all, that love can be hindered until we can love ourselves as well. Thankyou for your hard work!

[~Savannah~]

hmmmm....i like the creativity, its good, but it doesn't make sense to me. maybe im just stupid...i dont really know.....

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

I did enjoy this. It reminds me of my own disguise. The whole of it was brilliant and witty!

[The DuchessPoet]

Wow, what a delightful write!

Very, my dear Queen!

[Inactive]

This is very well done. It speaks to ones inner and outer personality's. I find it very inspirational.

[Wildecat]

Wow this was an amazin transformation I really liied this. I also appreciated all of the many comments you posted on my new poems. Your comments and your friendship are very important to me. Thanks.