Suicide Rhyme

Suicide Rhyme

A Poem by Queen of Cards
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this is confusing and a little weird i guess :)

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I've noticed that somethings not quite right.
I heard yesterday you had quite the fright.
I held your hand through most the night.
But you put up such a hard fight.
I couldn't hold on all that tight.
But I fought til day rose with the light.
Fought until you sighed with delight.
Contented with such an enormous height.
You put your foot forward and fell out of sight.

© 2011 Queen of Cards


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i really like this. :) goood work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I loved the rhyme scheme in this poem. I think a bit more description and imagery would make this poem a little more dimensional. The diction is simplistic but in this case it works.
I rather liked the ending, I have to say.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow this is really good

Posted 13 Years Ago


thnx :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


aw it's good!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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