~The Dying of Edna~

Many un-examined facets~

Edna has gone too far - out into open translucent water

With waves of intoxicating freedom, whale songs

Vibrating through her rebellious, gilded skeleton

{Floating out to sea, enjoying the view as you go,

Battered like sea glass - light shone through you

In a spectrum of revelation, your internal

Absorption with being uncaged led you

Astray into the abyss of this heart-gnawing

asphyxiation} ~

[And Edna is fixated on painting God’s

Image onto the face of her lover,

Obsessed with chronicling the numeric

Maelstroms between  two unlike bodies

colliding]

*~*

Author's Note

[The Awakening: "The foamy wavelets curled up to her white feet, and coiled like serpents about her ankles. She walked out. The water was chill, but she walked on. The water was deep . . ."]

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

I have the impression that Edna is romanticizing suicide by drowning, and the two unlike bodies colliding. Hence why I believe the sea is her lover, and she is looking upon it with admiration and amazement . . . You've adorned this piece so magnificently; it has that Edgar Allen Poe vibe to it (Anabel Lee) but with a twist: Anabel died accidentally (as far as we know) but the clues laid by your pen indicate to intentional death . . . Well done!

[Shadow Paradox]

This is so deep I don't really know how to put my own thoughts into words. Is Edna one of those Greek Gods? Is the Awakening a good book sounds interesting? But wonderful piece written here I just wish I had more to say about it, I sense a hint of longing and sadness. Very beautiful.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Wow, this gave me the chills. reminded me of how Ophelia in Hamlet died

[Extant]

This really was inspired by The Awakening. Chills, I can work with chills. *Smile* Thank you for reading.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

an interesting write that has a hint of sadness but I enjoyed it very much

[asdarkeyesclose]

i liked the sad overtones, heart-breaking- and the choice of image especially 'whale songs', 'gilded skeleton' and 'numeric Maelstroms'. this is a chilling poem, the type that stays with you long after you've read it. if we walk out to sea it is sink or swim and for those that choose to sink there is no happy ending only the relentless waves churning and the wind........ a powerful, emotionally-charged poem. fantastic.

[Extant]

Thank you. This is a mix of inspiration from the novella The Awakening by Kate Chopin and my own feelings. I'm glad it made an impression.

[joshua deathdealer]

Outstanding!! Poetry like this is what keeps me here at the Cafe.
"enjoying the view as you go"..love it! Great presentation btw.

[Extant]

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I am glad you enjoyed it. *Smile*