Perfect, you portray envy in such a fantastic way that I can't help but be drawn in. the flow of this poem is great and the imagery is very vivid. the color of the font also plays a very good role and matches with the poem. the emotions in this work are also amazing. So much has been said in such a small piece of writing. everything that was to be said has been said. Amazing!!!!
I like that the rythem changes, i like that you repeat a line for emphasis or whatnot, burn, burn, cold, cold it makes me read faster and for some reason, like i am on the edge of my seat. I have always admired those who can write what they mean in a short poem, that says it all.
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