I'm a believer that many are decieved by lust, thinking it's love. This is a great question for all first time lovers to ask themselves, am I in love with you? Nice write!
I think this was a cute write. It shows that you might actually be in love, but you are not sure yet. It does make me think though could you be in love or is it just lust? I love how it is twisted in the ending. Good job. Thanks for sharing. :)
Good write. Starts off strong but then feels a little forced, or maybe guarded? I would say expand this a bit. It has potential to be a really good write.
thought provoking question
it feels like the one posing the question
is asking someone else what they themselves feel
but it is only conditional and spoken in return
if the other confirms...
You're probably in lust with her and she with you. You know nothing of the identification you need with your vulnerabilities that she will aid, and you with her. Its all about Homo Erectus from a warmer climate long ago who still strongly relates. Get to know her stuff that makes her move, before you have to drag her by the hair about. I'll call the police.
Ah the biggest question other than "What is life?"
I loved this, it flowed well and it had some rhythem, i would only use some punctuation.
I have to say im glad this isnt a "heart break" poem, i cant handle anymore of those.
All in all, wonderful write :D-Harmony
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