Weird Times in Oscar High: Season 1 Episode 1 Pilot

In world divide by the meta-humans and normal people, a doctor decide to house four very special teenagers who only want to live a normal.

Teaser

 

Opens With

 

EXT. BEDROOM �" GREENSBORO, NORTH CAROLINA �" NIGHT

 

Inside of light purple bedroom, we find SIXTEEN YEAR OLD JESSICA WILTON was staring at her computer while listening to her IPod. She was completely unaware that someone was right behind until the person grabs her by the waist.

 

The Person (O.S):

Hey, Babe.

 

Jessica turns around to her boyfriend Peter McCray, a young boy around her age with brown curly hair smiling at her. She looked shocked to see him.

 

Jessica:

     What are you doing here? I thought you were going to back until next month.

 

Peter:

    My parents started thinking it look better if I went to school like a normal person.

 

Jessica:

For you or for them!

 

Peter:

What do you think? For them!

 

They took a seat on the bed and immediately started kissing. Peter started at the lips, then he hits the neck which makes her moan a little, and he went down a little lower to the chest area. He slowly start taking off her blouse when she stops him.

 

Jessica:

I’m not ready for that yet, you know. So

 

Peter didn’t say anything as he stood perfectly still like a statue. Jessica poked in the cheek and he still didn’t even blinked. She looked frightened when he fell back onto the bed and still didn’t move. Then he started foaming from the mouth. Jessica screamed aloud.

 

EXT. Outside the Watsons’ house

 

Police cars and ambulance van was outside the house with their light flashing grabbing the attention from all the townspeople. They watched as the ambulance personals took Peter out of the house and into the van. They put him into the van and pulled off leaving the police to deal with the family. Two police officers were standing in the middle of the living room while the rest of the family was sitting on the couch.

 

Police Officer #1:

So what were you doing with him at the time?

 

Jessica:

We were just kissing and next thing I know he completely stops moving.

 

Police Officer #2

You kiss him and he just stopped moving completely.

Excuse me, but I need to talk to your parents alone.

 

Kevin:

Kids, go to your room.

 

Jessica, Paulina (18), and Amy (19) walked up to the stairs and went upstairs to Jessica’s room. Jessica falls back onto her bed as her sibling surround her. Paulina sat down next to her while Amy leaned on the doorway.

 

Jessica:

I don’t know what happened.

 

Amy:

I know what happened. (Everyone looked at her)

You’re a mutant.

 

Jessica:

No, I am not a mutant.

 

Amy:

Think about it. You always were the weird one.

It’s not farfetched to think you are a mutant.

 

Jessica: (turns to Paulina)

You don’t think I’m a mutant, do you? 

 

Paulina remained silent not even looking at her.

 

Amy:

Think about what our family would look, having a mutant living with us. We didn't even know it.

 

Jessica:

Shut up! I’m not a mutant.

 

Then Kevin, Lucy, and the police force entered the room. Paulina and Amy moves out the way as Jessica jumps up looking very scary.

 

Jessica:

Mom Dad, what’s going on?

 

Lucy:

Sweetie, they’re going to need to you go with them.

 

Jessica:

Where are you going to take me?

 

Police Officer #2:

Come with us, miss.

 

The police officer walked toward Jessica and grabs her hard on the arm. He pulled her hard. Kevin jumps at the officer and moves the police officer’s hand.

 

Kevin:

Hey! Get your hands off her.

 

Police officer #1 hits Kevin in the back of the head with a baton while police #2 charged Jessica. Jessica screamed and closed her eyes. After a few moments she opens them to see everyone was frozen Jessica quickly started getting her things. She put her clothes in her bag. She gave her sisters and her parents a kiss. Then she walked downstairs and out the front door. She sees everyone in the neighborhood was frozen. She continue walking into the darkness.

 

Screen Black out:

Author's Note

This is just the teaser. I can't decide rather to upload the script by Acts or just upload whole thing. It is quite long, Please give me feedback on both this and my writing. Give me some ideas too you know villians, characters, or topics.

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

I think that this was quite good- but it reminds me a lot of X-Men with a title like "Strange Days at Blake Holesy High". I would think about trying to change some things from both of them. I would also try to slow it down a bit- everything so far has been going ridiculously fast, with not breaks whatsoever. There also was a random jump to "mutant" and an immediate acceptance. No one seemed to consider any other possiblities. What if he had been sick? A seizure, and aneurysm? There are more possibilities. Also-towards the end- when she "froze" them all, did she kill them all, like she did her boyfriend? Because that's what it sounds like, and if she did that on purpose, that is an important trait in your character, that might be really difficult to deal with later on.

Overall, I think that this is an interesting concept, and can be great in the future. I would look through this for grammatical errors, as well as some spelling mistakes (or typos). I would suggest putting stage directions in italics, as it makes it more obvious. I think that if you filled out some of this a bit more with more dialogue, it might make things flow more smoothly, and make the conversations seem a bit more natural.

Nice write, altogether.

-Coral-

[melissa]

Amazing

[Closedown]

I can pictur the scene really clearly and I am interested by Jessica. Will everyone else go the same way as Peter?

[.quan.011.]

Sky, yes I based some of the opening from X men 1.

[Mary Evans]

Ok i don't know if this is your writing or not but anyhow. The format and story are ok. There is one major script writing errors though"

All the intos must be in present tense. And no "I" or "we" (like "we find" paragraph 1) should be used.

I'm not going into the hundreds of spelling and grammar errors. Apart from that the style of script is ok.

And one more thing. Is it me or does this look A LOT like the opening of X-men 1?

[justAnumber]

This is a great teaser. It definitely leaves me wanting more. The pace is a little bit quick for me and I would like to see a little more character development, as I was lost with every name dropped. Also, there are a number of grammatical errors that could be easily fixed. Overall, I am awaiting the full version and would love to see how this story can progress, as it has a lot of potential. Kudos to Miss Coral for a solid review.