I'll wait for you.

I was inspired by a picture. Feel free to comment!!

I love you. 

And it is because I love you
That I wait for you
To come back to me. 

Every evening at the wall--
Our wall,
The same wall we shared our first kiss. 

I wait with a lone red carnation,
Your favorite. 
A new one everyday you don't come. 

I am a fool. 
I know this, but I still wait for you;
What if you come? 

I wait eveyday for three years.
I told you you were my everything,
You were my world,
And I meant it. 

For you, I waited. 

Until. 

Until I saw you with him. 
Your hands clasped tightly with his 
And it was like a million slaps in the face. 

Because when I told you I loved you,
I meant it. 
I really did. 

But you....
You didn't. 

Author's Note

Like it? Hate it? Tell me your thoughts.

Reviews

[Call Me Blu]

Did you mean her? Lol. Great imagery and emotion. This is definitely my favorite of all you poems. It has a nice story an I even felt my heart wrench for the character.

[Cynthia]

LOVE IT! not like it, I LOVE IT! And its so sweet with a impressive ending, I love how you end it! The feeling is really great and its so sad, when loving someone but the one dont mean it, its just wonderful!

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

I felt this deeply. I was always the odd one out. Your character has patience! The poem flowed smoothly all the way to the sad end. Nicely written!

[Ashley Myers]

this is sooo sweet!!! i like it!!

[KAREN]

I liked it! Romantic, sad all in one. Nicely done!!

[Christina East]

Definitely love it! It shows the crudeness of the pain the character is facing. The only thing I would suggest to you is changing the line "And it was like a million slaps in the face". It almost seems a bit casual compared to the hurt experienced here. Maybe change it to something like " And it felt like a million daggars in my heart" or something like that??? But that's just my opinion. Overall, this is very nice; well-done. :)

[WhatsHerFace]

Did you put up the one about the moth? Because I LOVE that one.

[Sarah J. Kelleher]

I love the story you've shown, it's very visual and very descriptive. I didn't see any grammar/spelling issues... "I'll wait for you..." This is a beautiful, haunting line. Awesome job.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

WOW! NOW THAT WAS WRITTEN WITH FEELING AND TRUTH! GREAT JOB!