You and I

Originally written for the 'What Is Love?' contest. I think it's pretty good. (:

What is love?

It’s the way you tell me

You hate me 

When we fight. 

The way you pack 

Your things

And say you’re never

Coming back. 

It’s in your eyes as 

You cry 

And tell me 

“I’m sorry.” 

Because I know you are. 

It’s the way your parents 

Got divorced

And you don’t trust 

Anyone. 

But you know what love really is? 

It’s the way your hands

Cup my face

Just before you kiss me. 

It’s in your eyes 

Every time you tell me

“I love you.” 

When butterflies the size of 

Elephants flap against 

My ribs. 

When I fix my hair 

For the millionth time 

Just before you knock 

On the door. 

It was when I told you 

“I hate you” 

For no reason

And you kissed me to 

Swallow the lie. 

As if it was never spoken at all. 

It’s the 

Ups 

And 

Downs. 

Because we were 

Never really perfect

Anyway. 

Love: 

It’s you

And I. 

Author's Note

Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Alicia™]

This is a sweet, and yet sad poem… Good job!

[Cynthia]

its so relateble! It really hurts, this poem is truly with a deep emotion. You have told a INTERESTING story through this poem, I love the screen and movie you make me see, Nice Job!

[GamingGal]

Pros: A very relateable poem that I quite enjoyed. The lines, though short, convey so much emotion and meaning in them, and I like that a lot. Being able to do that is a talent, and I love to see it. I could see each little scene you painted.

Con: None.

Overall: Very pretty, I enjoyed it quite a lot.

[Call Me Blu]

Very powerful. It doesn't lean on the sappy side like the title entails, but is rather sweet and almost melancholy. Nothing thats really gagging with over worded filmy sap, but a more subtle I love you.

[Eileen]

It's amazing. Relatable. Also it's amazing for a contest. You should've won. It's what a lot of people feel and I think for many you just hit that one spot in their heart that makes their eyes water until they relize what state they're in and calm down. (: Lovely work.

[Sarah J. Kelleher]

Ohmygoodness this is wonderful! I love when you describe the gigantic butterflies in your stomach, and all the things that us readers can relate to, such as fixing your hair for the millionth time. Loved this!

[Doug Ordunio]

There are some very good parts to this, as Gracie Lou noted. However, you keep saying "the way" you pack, "the way" you say things, "the way" your hands cup my face, etc. BUT YOU NEVER TELL US HOW?? Describe it so we can really see or hear it, or feel it. The addition of these elements would increase your expression!

[:)]

I think my heart is glowing :)

"And you kissed me to swallow the lie"

Cool...

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I enjoyed this, this is amazing

[Christina East]

Awwee!!!! I LOVE this!! Nicely done :) :)