lilith

proving you can't always trust

w***e of babylon, seducer of man
beguiling with your web of lies
bride of satan, destroyer of love
i journeyed with you to the bridge of sighs

purveyor of evil, messenger of fate
no man can endure your cruel, black heart
b***h of the underworld, queen of the damned
i gave you my soul and you ripped it apart

temptress of ages, tormentor of fools
deception is your killing blow
betrayer of innocence, angel of falsehood
i payed the ultimate for loving you so

mistress of mayhem, bringer of woe
man's servitude is your eternal bliss
goddess of darkness, princess of perversion
brought about my damnation with a poisonous kiss

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Aha! It's all your fault. (I was wondering what inspired BR to want to anally violate Lilith) :-D I'm sensing a bit of rage in this piece...just a touch. Maybe be a little less ambiguous with your feelings in future, give us a shot at figuring out what the emotional inspiration was for a piece? Thanks ;-)

[quinfinn]

go back to my much older postings, kimmer, much less ambiguous. thanks for reading me

[KAOlmsted]

I really should have a different color font for sarcasm ;-) My pleasure, quin.

[quinfinn]

sometimes i am rather thick, it is my current emotional state

[SteveB]

Well done. Reading it I was thinking of the litanys I have recited at mass so many times over the years. There was also a call and response feel to this, as if the litany was being recited while soto voce the individual told of his woe.
Very nicely penned.

[quinfinn]

thank you for reading, steve

[Vria P Crow]

Dear Quin,

Lilith is an i l l u s i o n for men. She was meant to be this figure to t e s t the sexual nature of men. However, I feel that she was just a lesbian who did not enjoy penis. According to the parable, Lilith was kicked out of Eden because she would not give herself to A d a m. Therefore, E v e is our Mother rather then the homosexual. Frankly, I love the i l l u s i o n of Lilith because she was assertive about her beliefs.

Under the Microscope

"bride of satan, destroyer of love'

This is a beautiful line, my dear. She is the Bride of Satan because I believe she is just sexually frustrated. Women that have the tendency to enjoy pain commonly are closet bisexuals or lesbians. Keep in mind I am speaking from my unprofessional opinion.

"b***h of the underworld, queen of the damned"

She reminds me of Persephone.

"betrayer of innocence, angel of falsehood"

this part touched my heart actually.
i get frustrated with people who worship Lilith.
she is meant to be an i l l u s i o n.
if anything, she would only welcome w o m e n.

"i payed the ultimate for loving you so"

awe :( *hugs

"goddess of darkness, princess of perversion"

you are correct. she is a "princess of perversion." she is not a goddess.

"brought about my damnation with a poisonous kiss"

you are not a damned.

CONCLUSION

this was a beautiful poem, quin. i am happy you featured this again. i feel comfortable posting my poem about her now.

yours truly,
veronica

[quinfinn]

i am grateful for your reading and analogy of this moderately popular piece of lore....i have been awfully busy with life for a few days and may be back to answer everyone's reviews in a few more...actually, i am enjoying some down time from writing and just concentrating on my relationship with elena. it has been a nice break. thanks for reading and commenting....see you in a few days, maybe.

[Vria P Crow]

HAHA me thinks that elena has you under her Cherokee spell. You are very lucky, kind Sir! Your version of Lilith was incredible. Nice work!

Have fun on your vacation! I bid you two the best romance!

[Leigh]

Its All About Eve or someone very similar, one bite of that apple and you are done for, great quality all the way through.

[quinfinn]

treacherous

[Tarry Franck]

OMG - I absolutely love this! Usually a stanza will reach out to be but this whole poem did that for me. Thank you for sharing.

[quinfinn]

read and review very much appreciated, Tarry

[Tarry Franck]

My pleasure as always :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

"purveyor of evil, messenger of fate
no man can endure your cruel, black heart
b***h of the underworld, queen of the damned
i gave you my soul and you ripped it apart"

Incredibly powerful write.. She does NOT sound like a pleasant person.. Great job with this.

[quinfinn]

she is not a nice person...thank you very much

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

No problem.

[Horizon K.]

Wow this is one angry poem! I feel disturbed just reading it... like hating this woman disturbed! Definitely expressing some dark feeling here Quinn!

[quinfinn]

oh, you woulda liked her, a real charmer...thanks for reviewing!

[de_maruf]

valo

[quinfinn]

thank you

[LA Lorena]

Again Quin, please remind me to never piss you off! ;) You do venom well! I can almost feel and taste the hatred dripping from this one.

[quinfinn]

oh that? just some tough love is all!

[Sheila Kline]

Surely a vixen who brought heaps of woe with her wiles....one to steer clear of FOREVER! - a mistress of mayhem, man's servitude is your eternal bliss - Bad to the bone!
You have certainly captured the vile ways of this evil woman!!
Excellent write!

[quinfinn]

thank you Sheila