"Part"

The space between your lips
tells me yes
sends me down
a lane of lime trees
flexing in the wind
reflecting sun glints
in the dew mist
of their wet flesh

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, now that is a kiss...succulent...sends the speaker places...and that traveling is so tongue-licious...

nothing like a parting of lips...most passionate...being an old catholic boy...kissing was the thing..and still is.

nicely worded..love that "lane of lime trees"

can feel the pucker from the saucy lime...

[Steven]

haha, thanks my man!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Seems to turn into a romantic...
yet effective moment of bliss...
ends relatively speechless..

[Crystal Elisa]

those opening lines are killer - and I've read it a few times with some different interpretations... wondering if lime trees sour fruit makes that a bad yes and not a good yes that was perceived... good write

[Steven]

Hey, where the hell have YOU been?! lol, what's up?

[Crystal Elisa]

It's a LOOOONNNGGG story... marriage, baby, divorced, healing, growing, learning, writing.... wow that wasn't that long after all! ;-)

[Steven]

hahaha.. well glad you're back on here.

[DaniElle LaPointe]

hmmm erotic distraction, yes is very important. It is the catalyst from animate to inanimate.from the dark crevice from whichthe word no also comes from, to bright and reproductive potential

[Steven]

lovely....

[Corset]

Bubbles, whistle blower, sunshine, beautiful goosebumps. She's America's sweetheart.

[Steven]

Sex. Haha..

[Corset]

yep, that too.

[Circe]

Love the soft brilliance and natural approach.. the words just melt into the imagery with such ease that it's no longer just poetry.. this is a marvelous feeling.

[Steven]

I like that. Thanks Circe..

[Ees]

Your words fall perfectly down the page (as always) to create feeling. I love the sun glints and the trees flexing in the wind.
positively beautiful!
Wonderful job, as always.

[Steven]

Thanks Ees ;)