Cold

So cold...

So cold...

I can feel the ice

slowly creep up my veins

I try to move

nothing happens

I try to scream

not a sound comes out

you said you would come back for me

but you never came

so i ly there

dying...

freezing...

fading...

knowing that you never came for me

thanks for nothing...

Reviews

[Cathy Wattam]

Nice poem here. Think you meant 'so i lie there' or 'so i lay there'? Otherwise, good descriptive piece.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Oh such a deep cold feeling in this write, I love the depth the emotion. The title fits well of course, as to the descriptions of your words in the poem. Nice write, enjoyed.

[$êlvån]

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[To be scene To be heard..]

Amazing your very good at makeing it to wear the scene plays in the readers mind.

[Draven]

The imagery in this is great, and the structure is well formed. Nicely done Pyronnor.