Chill

Kids playing in the snow Kind of long

We were playing in the snow

Mother said we could

Make sure you keep your stuff on.

"Don't need you to freeze!"

So we did

We tossed snow here and there

at each other

Just about anywhere

Our laughter rung in the whistling cold

As I leaned forwards, smiling and out of breath,

My hat and scarf fell off

But it was fine

I guessed

Then I realized all this running and jumping and laughing and squealing

It all made me hot

What's one less jacket gonna hurt, I thought

"You can't" Sister said.  

"Mother won't like it."

 I told her I didn't care

She shook her head and we went on

I was shaking  with goosebumps now

But I refused to put in back on

Gear is for babies, I thought

After a while, I forgot

My gloves made it hard to throw snowballs, so I threw them aside

Sister's admonishment she didn't try to hide

This time she said nothing

Immediately I felt the difference

My fingers grew numb and pink

My thoughts were blurred

It grew hard to think

We'd built a fort, to protect us from each other in the snowball fight

I sat behind mine

Against the wall to rest

My pants and boots were all that were left

I grew tired and slow

I needed to stop

I closed my eyes and slid on the ground

I should've put my stuff back on but I lacked the strength

So I just lay there for a long length of time

Soon thereafter I couldn't open my eyes or wiggle my toes

I felt the frozen snot under my nose

I fell face first and heard Sister yell

"What are you doing over there?"

My throat closed a while ago

I let her question go

She asked again

And again

I gave no reply

Now I know why Mother shad said ti

Then

Everything was gone

I could barely strain to hear her scream and cry

Full of fear

Then it went quiet and I saw the light

I felt nothing and nothing of it

But now, I know why Mother had said it

Reviews

[slfisher89]

Interesting read... like the slow build to the dark end