Farewell, Lover

Inspired by a nameless foreign film, wherein two lovers part in a snowy-dreamscape. Never really written about love before…I gave it a shot anyway!

 

 

Breath deep the pine scented air,

Cold wind whips my hair,

Snow is falling everywhere.

  Time suspended,

  But our spell has ended.

Far from your arms, am I…

 

Sweet lips ache from parting kiss,

Warmth seeps from your embrace.

  I gaze, wrapped in memories,

after your vanishing figure…

 

Fate, guide you back one day.

For I long to dwell with you;

  To speak softly,

  And to touch fondly…

Author's Note

Enjoy! Any Comments Welcome : )

Reviews

[Jeffrey Gershom]

You may not have written about love before, but I can tell your heart has felt it. You have been able to put into words the the special feelings of a last loving moment: structured at the beginning...formal, then slowly drifting apart to a memory. Being a veteran, I can't help but to think how many couples have shared this moment when their spouse, man or woman, has had to leave for war.
Again, very good job, Paris. :))

[Da devin]

Wow...True sober words from the heart telling of a lost love... Nice work sunshine....

[HaruHau-Chan]

I think this is beautiful. You can feel the emotions and you can just sense the pain in being left behind. Outstanding job.

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Simply amazing & Worded so perfectly.
Such an excellently expressed poem.

A. Chance

[Kelley]

I love that movie..."House of the flying daggers" makes you laugh and cry and that last scene was very beautiful.

I like your poem and it fits with the movie perfect.

Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Markymark]

For a sixteen year old with a scant grasp on love and lovers, you pen the emotion effectively. Unlike the others, I like the image you create at the opening. I think of a pine thicket with it's magic smells, and needles all around with the snow falling, It takes me back to childhood. The pine thicket was my secret place to think and dream.

Great write....

Mark

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i really love the depth of emotion in this poem.
it is just gorgeous :)

:)

[Emily Quinn]

Really good job on this Paris, your words are like liquid, so full of longing and raw passion. You should write about love more often; your very good at it (this comingfrom someone who normally prefers not to read the love genre) Awesome poem you have created :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very nice write! You vividly Made the emotion of love so strong in this poem ! I like It!

[Brian L. Archambault]

amazingly written

[Lorame]

Nicely written!