To them

A story about death. Which for all things, is inevitable. I right this to all who have died and all that will die. Especially, the ones close to you and I.

Skies turned a tint of gray

when you passed

We pretended and said,

 "Everything is okay"

But this facade could never last

Upon the fate of that morn

we sat and gasped

A feeling of dismay:

a state most forlorn

A day’s time,

we are still in dismay

Will it ever be similar

to the old days?

Far forgotten

are the days of your funeral

However, the joy you brought 

will never be begotten

The days of our lives 

flow along

But after all

Life must go on

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think! I hope you were able to connect with this. Poetry is my favorite form of writing. Why? Because it carries such emotion.

Reviews

[Ees]

In the second line "past" should be "passed" Past refers to things that have happened, passed refers to people "passing on". On a sidenote, I like saying they died better. they are dead. But that's just me. I always think of what my grandmother kept saying right after my grandfather died, "He didn't pass, by me in the night? Pass what? He died. He's dead. I didn't loose him? Loose him where, in the grocery store? He's dead. I know where he is."

I like the first line and I love the use of "tint of gray"

I liked the poem, especially in the last two stanzas.

[Alexander D. May]

Thank you for pointing that out! I must of overlooked it!

[Ees]

No problem. Happens all the time to everyone.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Enchanting, with the lilting "old word" charm. Without being disrespectful of the bond and relationship, the poem progresses and the poetic persona deals with the fading away and moving on of life. Very compelling writing.

[Phillitup]

Loved it. Such a fabulous piece. :)

[mandy]

death of a loved one is sad. especially if the person who died is young. but life does go on. very good poem.

[mandy]

alexander, i didn't realize you were so young. excellent work for such an age..keep writing!

[Alexander D. May]

Thank you very much!