Breaking Free

What was that

you said to me

About I was

your everything.

 

What was that

you whispered in bed

about without me

you would be dead.

 

Guess I wasn't

a good saving grace

your cheating

proved a slap in the face.

 

To all the things

you lied to me

all the things

you made me believe.

 

About happy

ever after

about love, family,

and laughter.

 

I didn't realize

you were such a b*****d

my thoughts and

emotions you mastered.

 

You made me live

life to your rules

made me believe

my friends were all fools.

 

Fooled them to think

that I was happy

when the whole

situation was crappy.

 

But now that I'm

breaking free

you still try to make

life impossible for me.

 

Still try to hold me

underneath your thumb

Still try to make

my feelings numb.

Reviews

[Adam Greenfield]

Spread those wings, Beth!!! Haha... beautiful. Just beautiful. Simple, elegant, blunt, and had a great "here's how it's going to be 'cause it's my turn now" feel to it. Awesome. I love the lines, "I didn't realize you/were such a b*****d/My thoughts and/emotions you mastered." Whew. That's good stuff, my friend. Good stuff.

[Akaila]

this was good! i could feel the anger and it flowed nicely too!! i hate cheaters! its like people dont have the balls to just end a relationship with somebody!!! anyway thank you so much for entering it in the contest!! good luck!
~akaila~

[James K. Blaylock]

Far too many loving people suffer under the hateful ruling of a evil tyrant.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Sir Walter Scott's famous, "Oh, what a tangled web we weave / When first we practice to deceive!", sums up your composition quite adequately.

It�s a strongly poetical righteous, well structured rant, highlighting the freedom you now enjoy and the reckoning of a scoundrel.

Time to move on and express your new self, by creating more compositions for us to read!

God�s Blessing
Phillozofee

[Pan]

When I read your work, this poem. I think of a innocent in an unjust Incarceration. And you no longer want to be as others are. Excellent

[1blaquote]

Standing O...The truth shall set you free!
Excellent flow

[Robert Luna]

Amen!!! You deserve better and are doing something about it good for you. Very powerful and I really love seeing this side of your work and a more relaxed pen that you are holding.


Great Job!!!

[Crazy Cat Man]

man i know a lot of women who can relate to this. im glad u wrote it. great job

[Charlotte Marie]

I like the emotional value you put into the poem! Well written and beautifully executed! Great read! Thanks for sharing!~CM~

[Sean M. Addams]

very deep message here... filled with lots of emotions... put together very well.