Is it better to change, sometimes?

Acrostic from a new writer

In and out it

Wanders through my psyche
I try to put the pieces in order
Longing for the right solution
Loathing the possible outcome

Now is the time
Everyone hopes will remain
Vacant in their lives
Exit signs look comforting
Remembering the Entrance seems painful

Beyond tomorrow seems like an
Eternity away, alone

Tonight I sit with my
Heap of thoughts, and I become
Envious of the guy I wanted to be

Since I can't have that
Anymore I am content to
Make the next person, inside
Even better.

Reviews

[ICE]

This was a great poem!

"Tonight I sit with my
Heap of thoughts, and I become
Envious of the guy I wanted to be"

I believe that at some point we all wish to be the person we dream we could be. The best thing we can do is better ourselves and learn from our mistakes.

"Beyond tomorrow seems like an
Eternity away, alone"

Beautifully written!

[deeps]

This is wonderful I like this.
I like the form. Well worded and well written.
Like emotions that came out.

[Water_the_Sun]

This is really an astonishing little piece of work.


A lot of times people get kind of gaudy with acrostics, or scant, and its hard to make them make sense while keeping them well structured and well flowing.

The feel of this poem was liquid and smooth, worded well, set up well, and the meaning behind it makes it twice as beautiful. I can empathise with it, on a certain level, though i doubt what we've gone through is the same thing, i can apply this poem to myself, you do a great job of conveying the emotion and the determination and will for life.

Bravo.

[Butterflymom]

This is beautiful, and very touching. AWESOME piece.

[Thunderlyrics]

Self awareness and discovery are the true seeds of wisdom...sometimes we must move on!

Well done!

[Capriciousoul]

Excellent poem!! I love the first stanza...

Beyond tomorrow seems like an
Eternity away, alone

I really like that part too...like..when you're alone or sad, time starts going so slow it feels like it stopped moving.
Anyways, great poem. I'll definitely be on the look out for more =]