The Future's End

I travel down this fated road
my future carved in stone
It seems I'm destined in this life
to walk it all alone

There's no one who can feel my pain
or know my misery
I wait for Death to take my hand
since nothing's left for me

My tortured soul keeps searching for
the comfort in the end
Since loneliness and emptiness
have been my only friend

The peace of mind within myself
can never be replaced
I long to feel the gentle touch
within it's Warm Embrace

Will the whispering still echo
inside my haunted heart
While the distant memories of the past
keep tearing me apart

Constantly I've had to fight
with demons of my own
So I travel down this fated road
my future carved in stone

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Amazingly (to me),
There have been times when your words express the exact reflections of my own mindset … so decisively I could have written this.
This piece highlights, not only your psychological, emotional, and spiritual feelings and depths, but fine skills as a creatively poetic artist, by composing so excellently in the Ballad form … I am quite taken, even impressed by this, considering so few on this site do so.
Your work in this piece is brilliant, I think, until L3 of the penultimate verse and L1 & L3 in the final, where the count is lost, tripping flow and breaking the spell.

It a pleasure to meet a poet … yet, your pen-name could certainly be made more welcoming … LOL!
Thank you most gratefully for the share! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Pure Evil]

LOL....the name came from my mother when I was three and it stuck.
I really appreciate the way you review, it helps me to tone the poem up, I certainly appreciate each review, thank you.

[Richard🖌]

Mothers know their brood best … ha-hah!
You're quite welcome; my review was aimed at letting you know how much your effort is appreciated, how I relate, and to offer any constructive critique I believe will help correct/ improve your poem; possibly, your skills, as-well.

You show a great attitude and willingness to accept critique … you will soon become a master of your craft. : )

[Pure Evil]

LMAO...that she did, she named me well lol.
Yes, please, give the most honest review possible...even if it means the write sucked. As you said, can't get better if I don't know what is wrong. Again, thanks for the review.

[Richard🖌]

If you'll take time and effort to correct your work from my sharings, I'll be more than happy to give them. And, if you'd like to see an example of how those corrections will better your poem, let me know, and I'll show you by messenger.

[Pure Evil]

Any input would be considered,for sure. I would appreciate all comments.

[Susan 🦋]

Is it carved in stone??? Maybe a different path is just one decision away. :-) Hmmm

[Pure Evil]

I agree with different path line....but, isn't ALL our futures carved in stone?
Thank you so much for the comment, I really appreciate it.

[Susan 🦋]

I suppose to an extend...free will huh :-)

[Pure Evil]

Well, The way I see it, we all die so the end is the same no matter the way it ends.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Almost word perfect! This flowing, well balanced, well metred, beautifully rhyming piece filled with pathos indeed chases the foolish notion that you cannot write. This is the second of your breath-taking writes Sir!

[Pure Evil]

Thank you John. I really appreciate it.