This Is How Love Dies

this is about how love is destroyed by materialistic wants

She dreams

A love so pure

Pure as falling snow

Radiant as reflected light

Shall always be

Eternal and sacred

Untainted

Never deceived into changing

 

Twilight crept into day

As how a truth crept in

Broken faith brought broken hearts

Grief staining the pure within

Bitter the poison brewed

Bubbling venom spewed in rage

Like black wine spilled on pure linen

 

Tears blurred out her vision

Sorrow blurred out her mind

The heart intoxicated by worldly needs

Needs that strayed her soul

Washed away the pure and innocent

Of what truly mattered

 

The night ushered in darkness

Same as the one sowed in her heart

Same as the one staining her love

Hurting it then killing it

Till it yielded and was no more

And she lost all of what she dreamt of before

 

Reviews

[Chris]

"Greif" - grief.
"Same as he one staining her love" - he? or is there a word missing?

I felt your thoughts and understood.

We dance alike
to the sound of heartbeats
and dreams
and sharing moments of magyk
and life.

We share all the tears
in our "darkness",
the moon's faded glory,
and the silent sunrise.

We remember
what smiling felt ...like
...slowly -
but we DO remember.

Chris

[Purbleazaleya]

Thanks for the corrections! I will edit it soon, my English Grammar isn't that great so I highly appreciate anybody pointing out my mistakes and helping me improve. Thank you :-)

[Chris]

anytime...take care.

[A. Amos]

Simply amazing piece of art and simply superb!

[Purbleazaleya]

Thank you for reading!

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[John Anderson]

written and beautifully expressed. Enjoyed it much!

[Purbleazaleya]

Thanks for reading

[Missy]

This has a haunting feeling to it - it's got so much emotion that it's hard not to feel it.

[Purbleazaleya]

thank you for reading this!

[1Disawsum]

Love this poem, very well thought through. We all dream of a "love so pure" and so perfect that we may soon lose our perspective of true love. We don't always get what we want, and love is one of them. Not everything goes as planned, and love is inevitable that something, a fallout perhaps, will happen.
Heartbreak is so sad, and it happens too often! It's not fair for anyone to go through the traumas of heartbreak, as nobody's hearts need to go through that, do they?
Finely penned, much congratulations! xx

[Purbleazaleya]

Yes, sad reality of life is that we don't get everything we want and we have to choose between things. Thank you for reading and reviewing this, I appreciate it so much.

[1Disawsum]

Yes, it's really heart-wrenching sometimes! No problem, this was a lovely poem.

[Isadora Swift]

Congrats on a beautiful poem! Some wonderfully thought out and constructed poems, "The heart intoxicated by worldly needs" to name only one. This style suits you very well, the first stanza is simple and beautiful, probably my favourite. Well Done!

[Purbleazaleya]

Thank you very much! Glad that you thought my poem is beautiful

[Chris Micha]

Wow this was really intense. Started off one way and did a whole 360. Failed love, depression, can sink ones heart into dark corners. Well done my friend! :)

[Purbleazaleya]

Thank you, I really appreciate you taking the time to read my poem and review it :-D

[OliviaOwens]

Poignant and true words. Evokes emotion and it transported me; beautiful imagery. Well done. -Olivia

[Purbleazaleya]

Thanks, I'm so glad you found it so beautiful