Rain

Rain steals his pain

I wish it would rain tonight..

Allow the rain to represent my suffering,

My confusion to be stolen by the tear-shaped waters of the sky,

So I can let go and just stare..

For a few heartbeats.

 

 

Reviews

[Lexi Nicole]

Sad yet beautiful. I love the way you compared the falling rain to pain. Very creative and to-the-point.

-Howl

[Latsyrk llorrac]

I like this one a lot, It's simple but holds a big impact.

Good job.

[J.Black]

Sometimes its nice to walk in the rain, no one knows if the tears down your face are real or not. It's short, but directly to the point. Need I really say more? No. The rain says enough.

[James Paulin]

This poem says a lot in a little. I wish it were shorter in scope and length or longer to develope the theme. I would tend to add pop to a shorter version and harmony to lenght. I like the potential !