Classes Cancelled (First Draft of "Every Long Sip")

Now there's a title that one could interpret literally.

Me and my cup of java.

Caffeine in the P.M.

I shant forget that nebulous afternoon.

 

There or somewhere -

The breeze carried multitudes of leaves

Like a dishonest friend

Leading them astray

These leaves

Pointless and irreleveant.

 

Nowehere -

My heart's hope for the next sunrise

Blown away along with these vagabonds.

Gone for now.

 

The Bungalow.

Sedentary,

Mind ever fleeting.

Prospects of taking a shower.

Saddened by canceled classes.

Is there any hope,

My lovely cup of coffee?

 

Like a phantasm

Resembling some former lover

From the past

She appeared to me

Beyond my door ajar.

Then entrance

Jane,

In all her half-naked glory

A tiny shirt

And underwear

Those contours

Exuding nothing but perfection

As the lights from the living room

Splashed unto her

That glistening chestnut outline.

 

A rush of blood

A reverie of long-gone lusts

Surging to and through my brain.

A fantastic excitement

That only her borrowing my pen

Would culminate.

 

The absence of ulterior motives

Devastates me.

As my eyes remained on her body,

Devastation yet again

As she thanked me,

"Thanks for the pen, Lisa"

 Realization overdue.

 

Reviews

[Gandré]

this is a poem I liked a lot. Tis is imaginative and amazingly constructed. such a rush of blood in brain and venes and wide-open spaces.... you possess an unusual ability to write a poem using our feeling after the feeling while reading it. no man may earn his heart desire, lets first be brave to smoke and fire says evans. l liked and that's why may i say: (just because of perfection, in the 9th line there is a typo (irrelevant)

[Emily B]

Nothing like a lustful title to draw in a reader. I had to get to this one right away. Maybe because it's Wednesday. Maybe because it just intrigued me.

It's not what I expected. It's better.

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

LOL gosh, such lustful reverie, innocent, yet culminating.
---mishel :S

[KonxOmPax]

Nice poem. To me it seems as if there was a sulking dreary state which is then only momentarily enlivened. I like how the idea of longing is present in a subtle way, somewhat in a conservative fashion as if to keep a firm control of the reins.

[Lucy Loves Red]

i agree. so serene as it is powerful. i like how you've included lines about the wind and cancelled classes that adds additional concepts to this poem which is generally about inner longings .

love it!

[Emily Elizabeth]

Brilliant! It had very hidden depths, I loved the style of it. Simplistic. Almost Japanese or Asiatic in its reflective style. Also very sensual. Great work!