Fate's Twisted Little Ways

I originally wrote this as a song but I think it works beautifully as a poem as well

I used to love you, I used to care

I used to love the way you brushed back my hair

But then I saw you with her, it didn't hurt.

Then I realized our love had turned to lies.

The first thing I did was ran to him

I said "all I need right now is a kiss"

You love her and I love him.

I believe that's when the scales started to tip.

And it's not our fault and it's not their fault.

It's just fate's twisted little ways

Fate is our undoing

Fate's what is causing this

Fate is our unraveling

Our love will be truly missed

I'll attend it's funeral wearing pearls and all black

We can put all the memories in neat little stacks

But I can't help but think fate really screwed us over

Fate and it's twisted little ways

I will always think of you fondly dear lover

And I'm sorry for fate's evil games

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Emotion really feeds your poem, seems to come from a sad, sad place, but, is finely laid. Experiences really can hurt and yet sometimes they teach us about ourselves, show strengths and weaknesses that need a little attention: need diluting or strengthening. If they haven't already, do hope things sort for you very soon.

[Coyote Poetry]

Fate is a bear.
"Fate and it's twisted little ways
I will always think of you fondly dear lover
And I'm sorry for fate's evil games"
Love seem never fair. What we want. We can't have. Who want us. We don't need. Great use of thoughts in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Arline]

Lovely work :) I love how the rhyming flows so smoothly and the emotion of love dying. Good Job!

[dan]

I like the way you weave little stories into your poems, the way that fate weaves its twisted little ways into the fabric supporting its life. I've always believed in destiny, fate's benevolent cousin, and the way it's guided me on pathways that pieced my life together. Your poems always seem to leave the reader wondering why, asking for more...? And that's a GOOD thing...like how would this LOVE have worked out without fate's damning influence? Leave them wanting more; deliciously scripted! take care...dan

[Relic]

There are some little errors but I agree, fate can be evil at times and something we don't expect. Its sad when someone you love doesn't love you anymore, very sad. Good job Raveness.

[wordman]

fate is wonderful,love is blind

[Raveness]

Indeed Thank you :)

[wordman]

my pleasure !

[Francis Orion]

Interesting twist on this poem. "Our love will be truly missed, I'll attends it's funeral" Awesome line. It's like you care, but you can go on. (Be careful I think "II'll" is a typo). I really like this poem. Great job!

[Raveness]

Thank you. I fixed it :)

[terry smith]

Fate is a fickle friend....I like this a lot :)

[Raveness]

I like your reviews a lot :)

[terry smith]

:D.........................