The Punk Poet's Soul

"The Punk Poe's Soul"


I'm The Punk Poet drunk on poetry
I make the lines flow with symmetry
Inside my mind a bouquet of words
I use them as my emotional swords

Every last syllable must have candor
Everything I write is fact not slander
When I verse poems it's a symphony
Each time I do another it's an epiphany

Where did it come from I have no clue
I can't believe what it's grown into
Three short years ago I hit a bump
Now look at all the rhymes I pump

Am I a natural you must tell me
Never wrote a poem till I was 50
Suddenly one day the alphabet was alive
It was true poetry my heart would devise

Straight from my gut, blood, sweat & tears
Self medicate so numbness disappears
Seems my gift helps more than just me
Healing people doesn't require a degree

I love to write, it's become my passion
Doing what you love always in fashion
Ok writing community get ready to see
The Punk Poet's book "Prison of Poetry"


The Punk Poe…
Always Be Punk…
Always Be Drunk…
(On Poetry)

Author's Note

Spelling words are intentional to establish my own style.

Reviews

[JayG]

One problem with a longish piece using rhyming couplets is that sometimes it gives a “rocking horse” feel.

You have a good feel for prosody. Though the line “Healing people doesn't require a degree,” kind of limps.

The main problem I see is that too often you’re placing the need to rhyme ahead of the thought. For example:

Three short years ago I hit a BUMP. Now look at all the rhymes I PUMP

Seriously? That’s such a stretch that you’re on the verge of Yoda-speak. Never bend the line to the needs of the rhyme. If the rhyming word isn’t the perfect one to express the thought, the fact that it rhymes is irrelevant.

You write well. Better than the vast majority here (though that is kind of faint praise, I suppose). And you’re one of few to actually look into the skills of the profession.

Have you looked at the excerpt from Stephen Fry’s, The Ode Less Traveled? What he has to say about the flow of words is brilliant, and I recommend it to all writers. And, while that book is quite good, his focus is on classic forms more than present usage.

If you’ve not read it, Mary Oliver’s, Rules for the Dance is brilliant. Her book on non-metric poetry, A Poetry Handbook ,is filled with gems and insights. You can download a readable copy free on the site I link to below (though not on a phone).


https://yes-pdf.com/book/1596

Hope this helps.

Jay Greenstein
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