Nothing But Lies

Not my best, but I hope you enjoy it.

I woke up this morning to nothing but lies,

Bodies decaying, buildings burning, the world still turning.

I woke up this morning to what seemed like a dream,

Except I heard nothing but a scream.

 

In this dream not even God ruled supreme,

Those souls were filled with so much yearning.

It’s hard to watch civilization die,

I woke up this morning, only to close my eyes.

Reviews

[The Last Poetic King]

The seven deadly sins will be the end of us, they are destroying us. Without finding the power in ourselves to cast aside the need for those in which we ravish. This world is devastated by man, god's greatest creation and the earth's greatest destroyer. Great work here, short but sums up a good topic.

[Annie29]

I like this (:

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought it was good. Full of emotion and it flows well. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Dev]

Ahh.. I've read better pieces by you, agreed. But not everything has to be par excellence to make sense.. I believe this was good.. There's no particular Rhyming scheme as such, but I do think It has flow. Nice write :)

[itsjustme]

pretty good poem :). kinda morbid kinda strange kinda makes you wonder when will the world end and what are we gonna be doing the day that it does. very nice

[Haifa]

oh too deep, very well done. Great and sad poem. Keep writing :)

[Ruth]

A day where the light seems lost, know that feeling but one person's thoughts of positivity can make a difference:) Great piece xx

[Anicca]

Brilliant! The emotion in this poem is good and it leaves the reader with more questions then it answers which in this case is a good thing. I liked your use of rhyme. Nice job!

[JenLyn]

I think it's very deep and says a lot in so few words. I would like to see it a little longer though, because I believe it would make the poem more powerful. But overall a good, unique and creative write. Keep it up! :)