Breaking Point

A poem similar to my earlier piece, "Life of Lies". About abuse, sorrow, and suicide.

Hindered by age

And destructed by superiority,

Considered a mere child.

Always left behind

Without a thought,

She dreams of running wild.

 

An abusive father,

Claiming she is a no-for-good liar

Though she swears she stays true.

He hits her,

He kicks her,

All of her courage falls through.

 

Curled up in her room

She silently cries

For a way out of this life.

She muffles her sorrow

Letting go of all thoughts,

And carves her body with a knife.

 

A breaking point,

She’s reached the edge

Of escape velocity.

Eventually

Her soul departed.

There is nothing more to see. 

Author's Note

I must admit, this is very, very similar to "Life of Lies", but different as well.
Let me know what you think by leaving a review and rating!

Reviews

[darem aq.]

you remind me of myself years back when i began writing and expressing, I was this pessimist with no hope or a driving force, i always looked at the dim side. However. I was, sometimes content with that, until one day a person ignited revolution within me, and encouraged me to get out of my shell, find the true me. indeed, I've broken out of this shell, and I can't possibly imagine my life now, if I stayed the same !
Life is like a roller coaster with rapid and dominating downhills, but its up to us whether to bow for this force.. or find ourselves in the times when we need it most.
Regarding this write: I sense surrender, defeat and bleakness. it is a good poem taking in consideration your age =] however, your experience should never limit your creativity ! I'm saying all of this.. not only for this poem.. nor I'm sure if it happened with you or not.. regardless. It just to tell you that you're the only one who needs to believe himself... external faiths are not fundamental.

keep it up ;)

Darem.

[r]

amazing

[Coyote Poetry]

We can be push into a corner. Sometime in life we need to be like a wild animal and we need to fight our way out and stand our ground. A sad poem. Could feel the abuse and the disappointment. A powerful poem with a sad ending. Never show defeat. That scare people to death when you won't bow down. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Ruth]

This is excellent:) A great use of reflection here xx

[Frantzuu]

This is great, stunning piece :)

[I Am Svetlana]

I felt the emotion. Everyone has a breaking point and there are two sides to every person. Never believe that everyone is right or is not lying, everyone has their secrets to hide and they soon are revealed when that person shows their true colors.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this poem was amazing. I really thought that this was a great write. My parents hate when I write like that.