Do You Ponder Me Yet?

Certainly, a question many of us ask when ending a relationship.

DO YOU PONDER ME YET?

 

 

When the moon ceases to guide

the exclusive waves to your concern,

do you still ponder my good health?

 

When the scent of my estranged

presence is lost in your nightmares,

do you still ponder my whereabouts?

 

When the last remnants of ache

dry upon your dehydrated cheeks,

do you still ponder my embrace?

 

When the brave flames of ardor

tire and powerful crackles resonate,

do you still ponder my chaste warmth?

 

When the fine blades of your betrayal

are nourished by my countless tears,

do you still ponder my broken disposition?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the word "ponder". These are the words of old men with time to think. In youth we danced and took chances. With age we ponder and wished we had done more. I like the flow of thoughts and questions in this poem. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Andrea Di Martino]

I like "The fine blades of your betrayal". It does cut like razors, doesn't it.

[IPMONER]

Wow.. it speaks to me like when I sometimes find myself gloomy and wanting redemption at the end of each day

[Janice Ann]

As you said, everyone "ponders" this exactly when a relationship of any types comes to a close. It is very well written and speaks clearly!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

A passionate proposal of thought.

[Loner]

Beautiful portrayal of Ponderousness...

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

gave me chills. loved it, i favoried this poem. I like the comparison you do, I do that as well. Makes poetry sharper, and a step above the rest.

[Allison]

This was really good, but I have a question. So in the line where it says "dry upon your dehydrated cheeks" is it saying that she's done her crying or that she's starting to cry?

[Brenda Caballero]

Your poem has a wide range in vocabulary, I like that. And as a writer, I appreciate it, because personally it's something I struggle with often. I'm no critic, so sorry for not being able to give you useful feedback....all I know is that your last stanza was wonderful. It made perfect sense, and the meaning wasn't lost in the fancy words as it often happens with ornate writing. It was like a rolling snowball...it felt like at the end it just got really big and hit...it was the most (IMHO) emotionally charged stanza, one that I think made a great ending to an already great poem. It was a pleasure reading.