Dark Ocean

Life is like an ocean, still at times rough at others. There are waves that cascade through it, some small others large. Their anatomy is always the same; inevitably they all come crashing down.

Life is an ocean, every ripple a story

Sometimes it's calm, sometimes it's gory

But one thing is certain, in an ocean so profound

The innevitability of the waves, doomed to come crashing down

 

Sometimes a wave, though majestic and strong by design

Can engulf others, leaving not a trace behind

For you, it is a feeling you never want to leave

For others, it's a reason to tremble and grieve

 

Others may try to ride the wave, and feel their own thrill

Maintaining their balance at the top, trying not to spill

They may think they've tamed the wave - mastered the form

But all waves end, and in the end they're torn

 

The ocean is dark and deep, filled with mystery

You sink slowly in the depths, a slave to gravity

It pulls you in and blackness overcomes you

Air escapes your lungs, but you can not breathe anew.

 

Creatures lost in time surround you, mocking your fate

The ocean is heavy with fear, sadness and hate

They nip at your cold lifeless skin as the weight above begins to crush

What once was so full of energy and life has become black and hush

 

Frost collects on your body, numbing you from the pain

It forms a casket around you, preserving you in blackness to go insane

You accepted your fate and the cost became steeper

That's the way of the ocean; it's always deeper

Reviews

[Third Grace]

Liked the changes, it really deepens the understanding of the metaphor.

[deeps]

I Love what you added on,
This is such a powerful write.
Like it alot!

[Third Grace]

Very profound. Lovely image of the ups and downs of life like the waves on the ocean.

[deeps]

Riding the waves or taking them!
It's all a sense of rush and freedom I think.
People always dream instead of doing.
This is really quite inspiring really!
You have a wonderful flow of words.