Castaways on Asphalt Roads

We are isolated when we couldn't follow the norm #notosuicide

Cigarette butts littered the ground 

Booze sending fires down my throat 

In white powder, dreams I found 

All was left was a suicide note: 

All my life I was lost at sea 

A castaway that never found home 

No island was there where I could be 

Dangerous waters I lonely roam 

Then a huge wave capsizes the boat 

I couldn’t keep the secrets on board 

The truth spills out, I try to stay afloat 

Anger’s an acid on my heart was poured 

I was walking down an asphalt road 

Paved by my parents’ good intentions 

But then I found myself in crossroads 

There wasn’t a choice nor a decision 

No one could accept what I have become 

I never wanted or wished to be this way 

Only deviants gave me a warm welcome 

I am losing myself and turning gray 

But a dauntless one held on and refused to let go 

He who swam miles to pull me out of the water 

And said that asphalt isn’t where flowers grow 

Yet I slapped his hand away like he didn’t matter 

I’m sorry for becoming me 

For being a waste of space 

For being what I couldn’t be 

And for losing my saving grace

This poem was written for a class project, and I'm really proud that my friends did an amazing job on the advocacy video against suicide.

Please watch the video (it can also help you understand the poem better: 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FcxNX0nbtko&feature=youtu.be

Director and video editor: eriz.xiu

Set designer (she's basically the one who adopted us when we run out of shooting locations T_T THANK YOU): Mama Mia

Storyboard writer: J9

Actors: they don't want to be named

Author's Note

Please watch the video (it can also help you understand the poem better:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FcxNX0nbtko&feature=youtu.be

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well.
"I’m sorry for becoming me
For being a waste of space
For being what I couldn’t be
And for losing my saving grace"
I liked the complete poem and the above lines. Not your final place. Just a step in the journey of living. Thank you Lily for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Psychotic Lily]

Thank you for the motivating review Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Accalia]

This poem, and also the video are absolutely breathtaking. They both send a strong impact as well as message, and you're right suicide is not the answer. Thank you for sharing this piece and keep up the good work!

[Psychotic Lily]

Thank you for reading the poem and watching the video, it means a lot to us

[wordman]

i`m ure the poem and video is great together
suicide is never the answer

[Psychotic Lily]

Thank you :D

[keith]

great visual thru your wordsmithing
this is a good write that is easy to read and enjoy
your writings show your maturity
your pen in hand has become a valuable tool

[Psychotic Lily]

Thank you ABG 2.0 :D

[Vic]

This was lyrical to read and covered some important topics and experiences. Well done

[Psychotic Lily]

Thank you so much Vic. I wanted to tell you I have bookmarked one of your writings that I hope to read after my midterm exams. I look forward to your work

[Vic]

Thanks, I guess I better start adding some content. I have been a little pre-occupied with school. :)

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Wow
Love this very deep
Great work

[Psychotic Lily]

Thank you very much 😆