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I'll rise and live among the stars
cause my life is draped in the light
of a pale paper moon
No more hearts cut from jagged thoughts
My own is weathered from the stress
of being ordinary

I don't like the ghosts of yesterday
they remind me just what I've left behind
I know I can be sour; a bitter soul
I don't drink because I'm afraid
that I'll lose the sweetness you see in me

But then I am not sure if I can believe you
what if you just want to protect youself
I wrote a thousand words of bad poetry
just to make sense of what I'm about to throw away

Reviews

[JayceeC]

E. Writing is good therapy. It does help us look at what is in our heart and mind. and hopefully you don't throw this out. Your digital library holds lot of joy, and even more pain, but there will be a day when it is a measuring stick of how far you've walked from the darkness.
right now it sounds like your sick an tired of being sick and tired. Not a bad start.

[Isabel25]

"No more hearts cut from jagged thoughts" - i read that line over and over again. I have mixed feelings reading this piece. It has bits and pieces of me in it. ...I have wondered many times if people i try hard to please just want to protect themselves. I have been on the receiving end too, I must add.

People are complicated, aren't they?

I like this very much that it made me want to comment on it. The choice of words are effective and provoking. But sometimes, a thousand words of bad poetry may not suffice to justify letting go of certain people or things....you might have to write some more.

[Hope Rose]

This is well written. I love it. Keep it up Elliott :)

[Anna]

So good! I enjoyed this. Creative minds do have the tendency to find the world that surrounds them very boring.