Sphere

This world is too grey for my taste
I'll hitch a ride to Mars
Add a new colour to my palette
and maybe I'll be beautiful

Here, the fields stretch out to tomorrow
Behind the waterfall, time doesn't flow at all
Let's enjoy the summer's warmth
before the snowflakes paint us blue

This world is too grey for my taste
I'll follow the lake to Neptune
I'll shimmer in my own reflection
as I shake the stardust from my hair

Here, the vibes are so peaceful
I can't remember why I ever felt so depressed
The crystal ocean of the sky embraces me
and carries me to where the dawn begins

Reviews

[Luna Zerimar]

So colorful. In your own way, of course.

I love how you put in the planets. That was really clever.

Although this has pain in it, there's something happy about it. Even joyous.
This poem took me into another dimension. Kept me stuck.

And when I was done reading this, I pouted. Pouted because it had an end.

I loved every line. This flowed beautifully, and your choice of vocabulary was simple, yet unique.

Goodness gracious, Elliott. I envy you.

[Mirra]

Creative and I love the imagery here. Well penned!

[Chloe_Spence]

A very well written poem with a nice flow throughout the sentences- each verse has an individual structure of it's own, which adds to the overall colorful and vivid imagery of this poem.

Beautiful :)

[Emily]

I love how you start it off!

[just Penny]

Beautiful use of metaphor and color. Sometimes, when we reach out and simply "be" we really appreciate what's around us. (Check the final line and "to"?) I love your mastery of imagery. Penny

[IvorySunshine]

Stunning write! Honestly, the amount of descriptive imagery in here is beautiful, and it certainly matches the tittle. The only problem; It felt like there should be more to this one, not too much, maybe just one last stanza. Love it

[Dark Poet]

Mosy of your piems are dark and sad. And although this started out that way, and has pain threaded in it, theres hopes and dreams.