Go Back 2 Sleep

This living nightmare is a canvas upon a blank life
Spread the black roses and cream tears
and destroy the sole convalescence
In my dreams I can be someone else
but here... here everything is so stale

Born in the ocean, tomorrow is where we drown
but to fight to reach the glowing surface
I'm sure it would be such a beautiful place to be
In my dreams I can escape from myself
but I don't believe I can live without going through this

All over again

Go back to sleep and wake up
when Summer finally blesses you
with the promise of a new start
Go back to sleep and wake up
as the sorrow fades and problems disappear
so you'll be greeted with something beautiful

This waking world is just another flaw
Nothing shines where beauty is created

Reviews

[just Penny]

Dark, deep but challenging too. I think that sometimes there needs to be a dormant period in our lives where everything happens and we are passive observers of our own existence. I like the lines "Born in the ocean, tomorrow is where we drown". I enjoy your writing because it has many layers and phrases like this will stay with me after the poem is read :) Penny

[BlackBird's Productions]

Incredibly deep write. I enjoyed the play with words, added to the depth.
Brilliantly written, the flow is really great. Nice one!

[EmilyBianca]

Beautiful writing! keep on writing!

[Luna Zerimar]

Beautiful.

"..This waking world is just another flaw.."

[eglantine]

"Born in the ocean, tomorrow is where we drown" what a strong line! I also adore the last line--great closing. I do wonder why "Summer" is capitalized, perhaps it's meant to be a person? Thanks for sharing.

[Emily]

Love the meaning of this poem!! Well done Elliott!