Waking Up in a Dream

Someone stick a pin the moon
so it won't float away
Maybe then a lunar rose will bloom
I keep a jar of cold sunlight by my bed
so the mornings aren't so cruel
though I'm shrouded in darkness still

Gather the rain with your hands
spread the joy over a blanket sky
Soon, there'll be little sunbeams for hope

I carved my name into the sky
and let the clouds sweep my memories
into a crystallized view of that moment...
Then you rise, Spring is in bloom
I hand you snowflakes
and you hold them close

Don't take away my sunshine
I need something to look forward to

Wake up beside me in this dream
We'll let the rising waterfall
carry us far beyond the Heavens

Reviews

[L4rn13]

Despite some of the words used (carving,sticking a pin in the moon) rather peaceful write. Imagery I had was o sitting on a beach with beautiful orange and pink-tinged horizon, while the moon hanging high swinging by a pin haha. Loved this.

[Tina Louise UK]

Wonderful piece, really enjoyed :) x

[Addy]

This is a very lovely piece. Beautifully written. 100/100!
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I carved my name into the sky
and let the clouds sweep my memories
into a crystallized view of that moment...

[zephyr]

The idea of keeping a jar of sunlight but your bed is inspired. You capture the beauty of the thought and futility of the action. You have such an elegant and developed pen.

[A. Amos]

Compelling and enjoyable read. Well done!

[Brook]

"Wake up beside me in this dream
We'll let the rising waterfall
carry us far beyond the Heavens" Such a lovely stanza.
Beautifully written, i really enjoyed it. Great job.