New York

I want to escape.

Can I be a part of your dreams for once?
I need a new role in my life
Such wishes are of concern to me
I wish they mattered to you

I just hate to be alone
I just want to be sure of what I want
Such wishes are of concern to me
wonder if they will be fulfilled?

I love the beauty of America
The women there each hold a piece of my heart
Such fantasies lie beyond my reach
I consider such as a Heaven beyond me

I just hate knowing each morning
that I will wake up alone and distressed
Such wishes pattern my life
I wonder if they will be fulfilled?

Reviews

[Red & Blue]

Intriguing write, one did enjoy.
The finishing stanza is just to die for.

[Keith LaFountaine]

Interesting question at the end of this piece. Wonderfully written with a tint of sadness and perhaps regret? NIce work!

[eglantine]

I'd move the "for once" to the beginning of that first line, with a comma of course :) I'd cut "in my life" in second line.

Solution: move to America lol

I am sure there are some awesome girls over there--keep looking!

Thanks for sharing.

[Simon Welsh]

I've found quite a few in South America, aha.

[s y e]

I love New York, my Dad might be taking me for my 18th :P Only two years away, hahaha. I cannot wait, shopping, shopping and more shopping, lol kidding. But seriously a good write.

~ Noodle.

[shallimarRose]

"I love the beauty of America
The women there each hold a piece of my heart"
Beautiful line Elliott.. I have heard others say similar.. I like your style.. shallimarRose

[RainDancer1997]

You write poems about things that other people can really relate to, and you know exactly how to put it into words:) great job:)!