No More

The monotony in your smile is blinding.
Suggesting in technicolor
that you aren't even trying.
Tiptoeing across the delicate balances,
you keep your status in check.
Your ego reaches the heights of legend.
Evermore the knight in shiny armor
to everyone but me.
I am no more the scapegoat for your aloof sensibilities.
A request it didn't occur to you make.
Nonetheless.
A gap is left upon my departure
unfitting to my form.

Reviews

[CharlieO]

Great write - well written and packed with vivid imagery.
I loved your opening, 'The monotony in your smile is blinding.' - the use of opposites (monotony and blinding) is very striking - it works well - grabbing the attention of the reader straight off - and the poem never lets go of that attention.
I enjoyed your use of imagery assoicated with technology (status, technicolour) and your use of more classical images (the knight) - at first I felt that they didn't blend all that well - but on re-reading I think they do. This is not a criticism - just me being a little slow.
I think you have managed to create a very personal poem here - your use of language suggests this. However your use of imagery ensures that your reader can totally understand and realte to what you are saying (I hope that makes sense).
Congrats on this write - it shows you have a talent - I hope the site helps you to nuture it.