Perchance, What if?

Perchance, what if

the doll-eyed giggle

and the thunder boom breath

were loud enough at last

to open up the fates for us

to write our names on the moment

to grace the ground with our feet

leaving traces of our steps

that we can finally take together?

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Nice piece. Very surrealistic and you've managed to present the topic well. One minor quibble, if it were me, I'd hyphenate 'doll-eyed'. As it stands it looks a little limp. Otherwise, very well done.