Enchanting summers

Just like that :) I hope you like it.

From the window when I stare at you

your eyes follow me

I see your open arms

you smile with a naughty grin

you whistle and you wink

your bare body makes me no blink

I find reasons to be with you

when I come near you

with no thoughts I undress

my needs you never suppress

you take me in gently

slowly and smoothly

you caress the whole of me

my heart pounces

when you touch my chest

each part of me feels elated

when you are deep in me

I feel I shouldn't breathe

I follow your flow

you whack my assets

and I love it more

you are never weary

you are in me as much as I want

Summer days you call me more

and all I want is to be wet

wet in you

to take a splash

to take a dive

to swim and sink

you are the only reason why summers are so amazing

I love to be in you

Dearest  swimming pool :)

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I hope you like it:) Please share your feedback.

Reviews

[R.M.C]

Thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece. Heading off on holiday soon to relax by the beach and pool so could't think of a better poem to read to put me in the mood. Enjoyed the little lead-on and the twist, well executed and very playful, a word associated a lot with summer, when pools offer such sweet relief and enjoyment. Great read.

[Prynka]

Thank you R.M.C, yes pools give a lot of relief and i feels its a different trans when you are in water. Glad you liked it. Enjoy your holiday, have fun:)

[Mary Christabel George]

Ha ha ha... nice one.
The surprise element at the end was good.

[Prynka]

Thank you Mary. Glad to see you after a long time :)

[Richard McLin]

First time I ever needed to smoke a cigarette after reading a poem about a swimming pool. This is a great piece. It makes the reader think they are reading about one thing, and then the ending drops them with a great twist, and they are laughing as they realize they are literally sweating while reading this. Great flow, and wording. This is a really good piece.
-Richard.

[Prynka]

Thank you Richard. I laughed when I wrote the last line. Glad it made the same impact on the readers.

[barleygirl]

One of the best sensual pieces I've read in awhile. I love the way your approach is slow & lingering . . . I hate it when writers rush thru the best parts! It's about the journey, not the climax! You've taken us on an endless seduction which feel uninhibited & simply-stated. I also love the way you use a total body-and-soul experience instead of focusing on intimate body parts & specific movements. To me, it's such a turn-on to be reminded of how this can feel in every way, in our imaginations, in our hearts, in our bodies, etc. Nicely dynamic imagery, too! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Prynka]

Thank you Margie for such encouraging words. I have written something like this for the first time, was dreading that I will rip if off. I am glad you liked it and understood the mood of it. To tell you the truth your RBF inspired me to write something like this. :):):) its not exceptional like that but I just tried my bit :)

[barleygirl]

First . . . it's the best thing in the world, the way we writers here inspire each other, so I'm glad to be part of that with RBF. Second . . . I just re-read & realized this is a love poem to the swimming pool! (The RBF comment urged me to reconsider how I understood your poem). Now I'm reminded of a poem I wrote that's similar to your message here. I've read-requested on it (How Good It Feels) Feel free to recommend any poems of yours that you want me to read! *smile*

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Thank you for entering my competition
Winners announced next sat
A delightful poem ending a surprise

[Prynka]

Thank you Julie. Glad you liked the ending:)

[Mishti]

Very creative one indeed..great twist at the end ;)

[Prynka]

Thank you Mishti.

[Mrudula Rani]

You lead us to believe it is something like an affair... and it is a love affair with the cool refreshing swimming pool. On the 6 th line change the wording a little for perfect effect. Well done.

[Prynka]

Thank you Mrudula.

[Haley]

very, very clever. i love songs or poems or stories that are formatted like this. for lack of a better description, you're essentially tricking your readers, which is marvelous and fun and it drew an audible laugh from me at the end as well.

[Prynka]

Thank you Haley. I'm glad I could make you laugh.:) Thank you for your time and positive response.

[¿]

Ha ha ha.......really liked it indeed!!
At first it felt like Boond Boond song from Roy film but at last it was all fun.
Thanks for sharing this, Great read.

[Prynka]

Thank you Tahsin. Actually ur poem Makeup inspired me to write this. I have shelved it in my library. Need to write the review yet :) it was so good dint know what to write :) Glad you liked it. Was thinking whether I ripped it off. I wrote something bold for the first time :)

[¿]

No, actually the bold makes the reader to end up thinking what she's written at first but gives a thumbs up when comes at the last!!
You should never lack in confidence in what you've written in fact put the logic behind it in front of them who thinks it's vulgar.
Cause we write they read, all they think isn't always right indeed!!
#cheers

[Prynka]

Thank you again. Will have to listen to boond boond song now ;)

[¿]

It's just the scenario I matched with the poem. But you definitely should try listening!!