Time

tanka

Please visit the audio reading to hear this poem

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8gaEafYvXhY

Published In Tattoo, Calling All Soldiers Home

Tattoo is a collection of one hundred syllable conscious poems, mostly brief with an eye to expanding peace and self-awareness. Included are Descartes Was Not a Mosquito, Just How Many Butterflies, and How to Heal the World.

Author's Note

captcha … usedness

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

how very cool .. i was prepared for something longer so was surprised .. enjoyed the depth of statement and brevity .. nice one for sure .. especially like how you embraced the hands in your poem :)
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, E. I was thinking on it and wondering why I choose to turn some concepts into longer poems and some into senryu and tanka and I have no idea but glad you enjoyed.

[B-poet]

A short and prophetic audio gem. Great work Pryde. An insightful & unique youtube broadcast. :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, Bpoet:)

[David Scott]

I did go to the audio file. It was one of those days I just couldn't find enough time to respond back... ;)
A fine bit of artistry Pryde.

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, David. You are here now:)

[Pryde Foltz]

or you were and now you are again … am I warping your mind yet … lol

[Baby Ricochet]

Time flies, crawls and we never have enough of it. Good one

[Pryde Foltz]

And thanks for spending some of the good stuff with me:)

[s y e]

You read so beautifully and I am still tripping over your accent, I just love it! :D Pryde, another out standing poem from you, so beautiful and true - so much meaning. Well done my sweet friend.

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, Sye. Love to hear your English tones:)

[s y e]

I have Soundcloud, will send you the link. :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Cool cool cool

[TL Boehm]

that last line, simply beautiful and so true.

[Amber Lily]

I enjoyed this because it's so true. What is there to contain time when the clock dies? Nothing. Time is it's own crazy thing that cannot and will not be tamed. An amazing topic for writers everywhere.
You also have a nice clear voice for reading poetry! I wish I could read out loud like that.
Great job :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, Amber:)

[Sectando]

I enjoyed the message although I do wish it was longer but that's not a bad thing! It feels like it was quoted from a longer, original piece or even a story.

Being cut off so short it did kind of leave that annoying "WHY!?" in my head because I was enjoying it and wanted it to continue. I started to get the imagery of a story of great civilizations and kings in relation to the message behind "time" as if it were going to be a parable. Again, that's not a bad thing because you had my attention and I legitimately wanted more...which is very rare with me as I'm very selective.

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, Sectando. This is a specific form of poetry. Tanka. It is deliberately short and is meant to leave the reader thinking so they come to greater awareness. So I am very glad it did its job:)

[C. Rose]

Very witty with the double meaning of hands.
It is interesting to hear the spacing and emphasis the way the author wants it instead of how I imagine it to flow.
Thanks for sharing.

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, C Rose.

[Jackson H. Harley]

Short but sweet, with a deep and powerful meaning wrapped up in a great poem, nice work :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, Jackson.