The Wisp

This is really an incredible read. I wanted to wait until I was a few chapters in before leaving a review; I've made it through four so far and it's a very enjoyable piece.

I really like that fact that you used the first chapter as a fast paced hook. The sequence had a very surreal aspect to it, almost like you were walking through a Salvador Dali painting. I also really enjoy the way you provided antecedent action in the second chapter without doing an exposition dump; it's a very clever means that you used to convey essential tidbits of the story.

Bara is a fantastic character; you do a great job of bringing the teenage angst and lifestyle to life through her. I can't wait to see what you've got in store for her in terms of growth and development. The dinner flashback leads me to believe that you have even given her flaws that will become an important part of the story and I'm eagerly waiting to see how those turn out.

There's really nothing I can do suggest improvements; thus far it's been a fantastic piece.Your writing and editing are impeccable; this is a very polished piece and it's obvious that you laid out a plan for how you wanted events to progress.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Posted 10 Years Ago

You would not believe it, but this my kind of reading. ;)

Congrats on your hard work, Pryde!
Own it girl!~xoxo~:)

Posted 10 Years Ago

received my copy today Pryde! so excited to start reading ... can no tbelieve that i have the first signed copy ..thank you so very much .. love and peace
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Need more chapters lol! I keep checking like every hour hahaha so hooked!! Can't believe the turn of events

Posted 11 Years Ago

This is really an incredible read. I wanted to wait until I was a few chapters in before leaving a review; I've made it through four so far and it's a very enjoyable piece.

I really like that fact that you used the first chapter as a fast paced hook. The sequence had a very surreal aspect to it, almost like you were walking through a Salvador Dali painting. I also really enjoy the way you provided antecedent action in the second chapter without doing an exposition dump; it's a very clever means that you used to convey essential tidbits of the story.

Bara is a fantastic character; you do a great job of bringing the teenage angst and lifestyle to life through her. I can't wait to see what you've got in store for her in terms of growth and development. The dinner flashback leads me to believe that you have even given her flaws that will become an important part of the story and I'm eagerly waiting to see how those turn out.

There's really nothing I can do suggest improvements; thus far it's been a fantastic piece.Your writing and editing are impeccable; this is a very polished piece and it's obvious that you laid out a plan for how you wanted events to progress.

Posted 11 Years Ago