Toffee

Chocolate, sugar highs, and all those sweet addictions we sometimes treat ourselves to and reach for a little bit of happy heaven

 

Crunch,
Scars my teeth
But I enjoy
The taste prevails
Toying with my mouth

Like a pawn
In the game of delights
I succumb
Cookies and milk
My weakest spot

Chocolate chip
Little dots sprinkled all around
Perfect balance
Magical oven
Fireworks before my closed eyes

You moan and I reply
Like a dance in the late nights
The morning hour
Our daily detours

Melt,
Like the fever in my head
The block fades away
Clearing up the clouds
Toying with my mouth

My sweet addictions
Sugar highs

© 2007 Prudence

Author's Note

Honest constructive reviews with a focus on the construction of the piece... preferrably while eating a chocolate bar (good happy chocolate though). Say Ghirardellis... ;)

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

Ah haha, please throw some my way, my name is Armada and I'm a chocolate and sugar addict, it has been 2 hours since my last fix, and I swear i'm trying so hard to address the problem, but you see I'm like you, I can hear it calling me from the cookie jar, it makes a funny muffled sound, and my ears ring, and my heard hurts until I cant take it anymore.=)Great dedication to one of my major food groups, I love it

[Miles McGee]

makes me think of eating till im sick. haha. yeah it also reminds me of the game candyland. great now i am going to go and bye to to play while eating abunch of junk food. thanks lol

[Bubo]

Tempting me?!!!

Loved it.......all the senses I could taste and feel..............
All sugar highs!! And we all need them some of the time!!

You moan and I reply
Like a dance in the late nights
The morning hour
Our daily detours

[O!]

I JUST SWORE OFF CHOCOLATES AND THE LIKES THIS EVENING!!!!!!!!!.......AM MAD AT U FOR MAKING ME READ THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :-P

the above is true hahhhahah.........

i loved this......but am not gonna save it!!.......it makes ur mouth want just ONE more!!......u bad girl...

its funny and TEasing!!.......clever write!!.......

aaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

xxxx
O! :-)