My precious

Dedicated to two of the most important men in my life, my baby brothers. Started out as a song for one of them, but turned into a new variant... With all my love

 

Big broken eyes watch me
Big trusting eyes contemplate me
Big comfortable eyes search mine
Big perfect eyes break me

Strength…
It’s what defines you
Only skin and bones
but you are the strongest person I will ever know

I want you both to know

Fragile…
You’re everything but that,
Still I can’t help wonder
What this cruel world will do
To your perfect innocence

I need you both to know

Blind…
Is my love for you 
My heart is locked
But never for either of you

The key is missing
But you just have to smile
And I will fight all the monsters in the world
Just for the two of you

I need you both to know
My precious baby boys
I love you
More than words can say

I need you both to know
My perfect baby boys
You can have it all
You should have it all!

Forgiveness
Is what I hope you can offer
If all you remember is the bad
The shouting and the busy hand
Waving you good bye
When all you wanted was to play another game

Lottery tickets
Is what I’ll keep buying
Because someday I’ll get you the big win
And I know
Together you’ll deserve it

Unbreakable
Is the promise I make to always be here
And the bond the two of you should hold dear

Family…
Is what we are
And through the secrets and the lies
The screaming and the fights
I need you both to now
My perfect baby boys
I love you so

I need you both to know
My precious baby brothers
That even when you grow into men
You’ll always be boys in my head

 

© 2007 Prudence

Reviews

[Goodbyeguilt]

Aww lush :D

It's one of those 'I don't rhyme but I kick A*S' poems.

It's sweet and tender and loving.
Gentle and caring.

Just like a mother :D

Well done,
I very much enjoyed.

GBG - Leah

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a beautiful piece, It is well written and precise. I loved the air of mystery about who you where until the end. Great Job wonderful write.
Debby

[Jake The Destroyer]

very well written...I was intrigued the whole time trying to figure out her relationship to the two boys and I love how you wrap it up in the end. Overall I freakin love it! but a review is not a review without some helpful criticism...I'm not trying to be an a*s...I would just say you should work on the rythm because even though this poem captures exactly what it means to it is missing that free flowing element in my opinion. This is something I have been working on as well so I know its annoying... Keep on sharing your work, its amazing.
-Hugs
Jake
P>S. My real name is Jake

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

How much you love these two babes shines through with beautiful words.
I love this and am shelving it . So poignant it brought tears to my eyes.
I love children and so glad to find others who feel the same.
These lyrics/ poem are beautiful.

Peace

[Www.prusite.com]

Prudence,To be honest, there are not many textes that really touch me. Others would hate to know it takes a lot for me to really love their writing!!! I just mean it takes a lot to really move me! I'm not flattering, I'm just trying to be real with you because you've been really real with us as you share this poem and with your boys as you wrote it for them.All parents love their children, though there are some contradictions and complications in the so unique relationship that is parents/children. But let me tell you that your words raise true emotions and could bring tears in the eyes. I cannot quote lines of the poem to say what is my favorite part ortherwise I would have to copy paste it all! Great job for the rhymes bringing the beginning of the rhythm of your emotions...Thanks for sharing this touching writing. Excellent!J 317

[O!]

THis is really so sweet........love the affection here......dunno about how itll do as lyrics, so cant comment on that......but i just love the piece....

a lil typo in the second last stanza: now = know

it brought a smile to my face.

THank you for sharing :-)

O! :-)

[Alia]

Hahaha, I thought of Smeagol too when I saw the title. Too much LOTR for me.

I liked the sincerity of the piece, the pure love shining through. I'm horrible at critiquing lyrics because it's difficult to really offer advice on something I cannot hear. But this would make a precious lullaby.

Alia

[Ashly Christen]

title made me think of lord of the rings :)
and these lines
"Big broken eyes watch me
Big trusting eyes contemplate me
Big comfortable eyes search mine
Big perfect eyes break me"

but this piece is much more than that
full of love
warning
a lil regret

"The key is missing
But you just have to smile
And I will fight all the monsters in the world
Just for the two of you "

this was beautiful and touching
well done!
"mother is god in the eyes of a child"

[Miles McGee]

excellently done i like it alot.