Perfection & all those salty tears

Short and sweet...

 

I have this star in my hand

Pretty and precious

Oh how I wish to hurt it

So simple, just a snap of my fingers

A word... Barely even an effort

 

Almost too easy

 

I hold this heart in my hand

I never asked for it in the first place

I never asked for you to hold mine

I asked you to let it go, over and over again

Instead you crush and squeeze

 

Almost as if you enjoyed it

 

There was a time I thought you knew everything

There were moments I thought I was crazy

There are times when I presume you to be out to get me

Then I realize you just react

Damn, this world is cruel

 

You always told me 'don't be anything, be something'

You keep reminding me 'don't dream, do'

You're voice doesn't fade at 'no, not that... that's not for you'

Yours truly, 'do you really think this is the way to care?'

 

I forgive you

 

It's just a word

Just a thought I had

Perfection is impossible, and oh so boring

I hate you for doing this to me everytime

But I understand

Or at least, that I can never understand

 

Or, at least I'll try

 

I have a batch of emotions in my hand

I want to press, squeeze and crush it

But something is holding me back

 

Stupid chick flick moments...

 

Reviews

[Hold Fast Hope]

Don't assume something is too long or too short. It's not the length that makes something great, but what you write. Let the words flow out. Don't worry if it doesn't make sense at the time you wrote it. You'll see later the things you meant that you didn't see before.

You are doing great. Keep up the good work.

[Catastrophe]

that was sweet; i really love the single line stanza's
you did that very well; and the metaphors are just beautifull
i enjoyed reading this poem of yours, great work

[doctor's diagnosis]

i really like it. i love the single lines, they're like afterthoughts. i don't think its too long necessarily, but i think if you wanted to end it sooner, after the "i forgive you" would be a good spot. :]

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh I think I understand your going through all the emotions and confusion after losing a love you thought was fine... trying to fifure out if it was something you did or is it just them. The hurtful emotions spilled out of this poem with grace and ease... very well done.

[Cdnsurfer]

Oh! I understand this one "perfectly" ... but from the other side. Ha ha! Interesting to see it writ as this. Relationships are funny stuff, but the cliche is cliche for a reason. We all do it. I can't suggest changes to this piece, but it certainly started the gerbil running overtime. Cheers! Rob