good morning

Divya the credit goes to you, for after reading your ''bad good morning'' i wanted to show a beautiful morning in India :) especially for you.

 Wonderful Morning

I open my lids to a beautiful morn, slow

Orange chariot rider makes my face glow

Birdie, flapping the air and twittering away

Whites droopy, colored shuddering with gay

 

Drops gathered at night, leaf on me hurls

Dewy fragrant breeze plays with my curls

Butterfly flitting showing off her colorful attire

Cat, for milk, mewing, rubbing, no signs to retire

 

Kids' splashing water add to nature’s music

Peace, on hearing chanting hymns from relic

Rustling of leaves being swept off the road

Clanking of washed out metals when stowed

 

The smiles that from heart to lips rise

Faith rekindled jaunts sparkling the eyes

As I rise filling the blessings of nature borne

Once again I hopefully welcome the new morn.

7.38pm, 15 Aug, 13

 

Reviews

[The dark story]

i loved it. the diction and the rhythm really adorns this write . i liked the way you have painted the vivid imagery and the rhythm in the atmosphere which embraces us early in the morning. its like it rejuvenates our mind and soul resurrect that peaceful ravishing part of the earth. a beautiful poem. thanks for sharing.

[Prritiy]

Thanks a lot Atiba for giving your precious time to read and to give such a beautiful and encouraging comment.

[The dark story]

my pleasure.:)

[Prritiy]

:)>>>>>>>>>>>>

[Ees]

I want you to know that I didn't read your poem, but that I have a real reason for posting a review. Pictures and colors make poems look cheap to me. The words might be beautiful or terrible, but they were chaotic to read, they looked vain in a way and like they were trying to hard to get my attention.

You can discount this review as being written by some a*****e and I am okay with. I might, very well be an a*****e, but I thought I owed it to you to explain why I didn't read it. Just in case it makes you think a little and see poems in a different way.

[Prritiy]

Its fine that you wrote what you felt, to each his/her own :)

few people like pictures and colors in life, like me too, maybe because they are searching for it or whatever their senses wish out of them, and as far as body of the poem goes it was in one color and normal font that's what i think, feel. and its absolutely fine if you do not think so, because You are You, a unique human being :)

I have read poems of different people, some in plain black n white and some very colorful, at times each word too, and some with pics too, i see what i like and read the words, try to understand the feelings to learn :).

everyone has his/her own shortcomings and i have that too, maybe something in my psyche makes me do what i do :) but i didn't feel bad with what you wrote at least you acknowledged me and told me what you felt was not correct and that the reason we all share to learn, understand and again learn :)

I am thankful to You for your kind visit and giving your precious time to me, thanks a lot.

[Ees]

Thank you for your nice response back to me. I am a person who loves color and patterns and pictures in real life, maybe it is because I am an artist that I find it hard to read poetry that isn't in black and white. It distracts me from the words. And that is all that I wanted to point out, that it turned me off from reading, just as something to think about, I always try to give people something to think about in my reviews and I hope that people do that when they review my work too.

but there is this other thing, when you pick up a book of poetry, how often do you see a whole lot of color or nice pictures? once in a while you see black and white sketches... but...

[Prritiy]

:) I am glad you are an artist
i wish i could draw and paint but i am not good at it so i i do this sort of thing in photoshop :)

i understand it might distract you as you have your own way to look at things :)

and as far as looking at pics is i do look at them as they again take me to a different world and i try to connect the write with it, comparing or taking it in my own imagination, at times i did scribble lines by seeing some pics too :) black n white pics show a different world and the same pic in color brings out something different.

and yes when i read then i read the words and color comes to play if it holds some part as at times i have read people using it to emphasize some part n me too :)

again many thanks for your kind words.

[Rose of many colours]

Beautifully written. very moving, the essence of nature is well laid out. Your friend is special.. to have this to behold. God bless.

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much for your lovely words and flowery visit :)

[Rose of many colours]

Ha ha you are wecome

[Prritiy]

:)))))))))

[Talal Hussain]

A refreshing write...great imagination :-)

[Prritiy]

Thankyou Talal for your kind visit and encouraging words.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

This is a very interesting, well written with a strong clear voice and easy to read.

Definitely with the illustrations you catch the readers attention.

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much dear for you lovely words :)

[MOON]

Lovely Priti, great imagery for a beautiful morn!

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much for your kind visit and lovely words.

[Don Shaw]

A joy to read such a peaceful write. Great work!

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much Don for your kind appreciation.

[Ency Bearis]

Refreshing write for an earl morning thoughts, delightful poem

[Prritiy]

Thanks a lot Sir Ency, am glad it delighted you. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

A joyous uplifting write of nature. The imagery you employ brings us to the scene painting a multicolored portrait of the dawn. How beautiful. Lydi**

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much Lydia for your kind visit and encouraging words. Am glad you liked it. :)

[StoryTellerWriter]

i REAlized only now that your name stands for pretty. nice india.

[Prritiy]

:) actually the name given by my parents is spelled 'Priti' which i changed in letters, in our national language Hindi it means love, affection. thankyou so much.

[zainul]

Great write that makes me hum like a honeybee around the piece.
Please push your name down from your face and place it in a suitable place.

[Prritiy]

Thanks a lot Zainul for gracing my lines. Am happy you liked the write :)
that pic i deleted it from my system.....sory
Thankyou for your time :)

[zainul]

You are always welcome.
This is all my pleasure.:)

[Prritiy]

:)))))))))