she is my mother

originally written in my language Hindi (http://prritiy.blogspot.in/2011/01/blog-post.html), but i believe the essence is there.

She is my Mother

love flows continuously
improving the world smilingly
striving for good of all persons
who has taught me these lessons

she is my mother
 
sharing of, all acquires
showing mirror to desires
family comes first always
who showed me these ways

she is my mother

sleeping sometimes discontent
filling, every heart with content
jaggery is sweeter than sweets
who preached sacrifice concretes

she is my mother

giving warmth to young
showing reverence to elder
giving up self-pride for other
who showed the mode of honor

she is my mother

get respect always by all

considered lovable by all
smilingly, face the obstacles

from where, got these counsels

she is my mother

astute just like mother
industrious just like mother
today I am beloved daughter
who gave me this lovable candor

she is my mother

 

Reviews

[llala]

beautifully written,
i enjoyed this

[Prritiy]

Thanks a lot Jasmine, pray your fragrance spreads far and wide :)

[one sky]

Nice tribute to a mother.
Just so wonderful from a wonderful daughter.

Esta maravilloso!

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much for the marvelous words Margaux.

[AYVID N]

So beautifully written....
Mothers are amazing. But she is also blessed to have such a loving daughter such as you. Great pic too. Keep writing!

[Prritiy]

Divya thank you so much sweetheart, you made my day with so beautiful words :)

[Prritiy]

Did you read the Hindi version, i would love if you read that too because personally i feel it will be more touching to you too.

[AYVID N]

You are welcome Prritiy. I will surely read the Hindi Version. It will be a pleasure. Keep writing!

[Prritiy]

वो मेरी माँ है
*****************

बहे स्नेह्धारा अविरल
संवारूं जग को प्रतिपल
करती रहूँ सबकी भलाई
किसने है सीख सिखाई

वो मेरी माँ है

हर चीज को मिल बाँटना
चाहों को शीशा दिखाना
परिवार पहले है आता
कहाँ से ये गुण समाता

वो मेरी माँ है

भूखे पेट कभी सो लेना
तृप्ति हर दिल में भर देना
गुड़ बर्फी से मीठी पाई
किसने त्याग की रीत बताई

वो मेरी माँ है

छोटों को दुलार करना
बूढों का मनुहार करना
सबका मान है स्वमान से बड़ा
किसने दिखाई सम्मान की विधा

वो मेरी माँ है

सबकी प्रिय हूँ मानी जाती
आदर सबसे निरंतर पाती
मुस्काते , बाधाओं से लड़ना
कहाँ से आई ये प्रेरणा

वो मेरी माँ है

माँ सम कर्मठ हैं कहते मुझको
माँ सी सायानी है कहते मुझको
हूँ आज जो सबकी दुलारी
किससे पाई ये छवि प्यारी

वो मेरी माँ है!

[AYVID N]

This IS the original version and it is far far superior to the English version. You are a truly talented Hindi poet Prritiy! Please keep expanding your horizons in Hindi poetry. This poem is so good it could be used in Hindi textbooks in Schools. Just class.

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much Divya. I am deeply touched by your wonderful words. I do not have words to express my gratitude. :)

[AYVID N]

It was my pleasure to read and realize what a storehouse of literary skills some of our young writers are - both in our Mother Tongue and English! Your talent is unique. Nurture it.

[Prritiy]

I am deeply touched by your profound words :)

[Akshat♥]

Wow, amazing write :)
I can totally relate to it
Full of feelings..Keep writing!!

[Prritiy]

Thankyou Akshat, am glad you liked it, i hope you read the hindi version too :)

[Akshat♥]

okay :) you are welcome :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Wow, nice photo, is that you in the picture Prritiy.

The poem is really good and it shows how your family thinks. My favorite line in the poem is "family comes first always"

Congratulations, amazing.

[Prritiy]

Thank you so much Dear. Yes that me with my Ma.
Heartfelt gratitude :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Seems to read a bit of something I read earlier and commented on... has the same feel and plot with the subject... the variables also... with the rhyme scheme and development of the lines...

[Prritiy]

O really Glen i would love to read that if you could please tell me, as far as feel goes, love of mother will bring similar feelings.

Though i know you might have never read mine as it was some days earlier i wrote it in English which was initially written in my own language Hindi and for this I give credit to Sami as his poem on 'Mother' and his encouragement made me do this translation. The Hindi version is also posted in my remark which was written on 10/8/10 posted in my blog on 11, Jan 2011 (http://prritiy.blogspot.in/2011/01/blog-post.html).

One thing i would like to share i remembered on reading you, it happened earlier with me too i had written few lines on love and it happened someone had written similar though less lines, which someone remarked upon rather his tone had been accusing and a couple of years later the person who had written something similar to me showed his lines, it was nice to read his few similar lines.
I believe the words linger on in atmosphere holding us and prompting us to write sometimes we do, sometimes we don't.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/JadeToledo/1171342/

Both deal with the same topic... I believe you will agree with me once you read the lines of her work... I just do the random and pick a writer... and go with it... I have to go back and read a bit more to get a vibe of her style... Good day!!!

[Prritiy]

yes some of the essence is same, but i think she has explored it in quite a different way, isn't it?

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Of course... unless both of you have the same mom... hehehe... Did you see how she arranged her rhyme scheme... Pretty intricate... how the words are placed...

[Prritiy]

yes but her way is quite different from mine that is what i felt on reading her and she has explored it in quite different angle contentwise too. I guess similarity ends with first para, from second para she has gone in quite a different route.

Her last syllable rhyming scheme goes as abb, cdc, effgg, hihi, ejj, kk whereas mine is always four lines in the style of aabb/ccdd... and same line in between each para.

Though i cannot say much about it as i am still a student with very less knowledge of the intricacies
of writing a poem and i just say i just scribble my thoughts as i don't know much on writing a poem.

Our mom is not one but i guess we both have loving Mom and we are happy and quite proud of it too :) and also we value what we have been Gifted by Lord as it is said "God couldn't be everywhere so he gave us precious Mom" :)

Best Wishes
Though I thank you for telling about one another write on Mom, i have read so many till now in other language too and most of them are wonderful.

[Marie]

What a nice tribute to your mother. Blessings on you both.

[Prritiy]

I am blessed to have blessings, heartfelt gratitude :)

[zainul]

Salute you,dear beloved daughter of the respected mother.
Live long amidst the love of your beautiful mother.

[Prritiy]

Thankyou Zainul for such warm wishes. I am touched.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. What a lovely tribute to your wondeful mother who looks so nice and elegant in the pic along with yours. All love verses from your heart...In my library...:)

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much Sami for your wonderful words and honor. Words are less to express :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome . Any time...:)

[Prritiy]

:) ..............

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)...

[Prritiy]

there should be like for re-comments too :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep......:)

[Prritiy]

The Hindi Version follows

[Prritiy]

वो मेरी माँ है
*****************

बहे स्नेह्धारा अविरल
संवारूं जग को प्रतिपल
करती रहूँ सबकी भलाई
किसने है सीख सिखाई

वो मेरी माँ है

हर चीज को मिल बाँटना
चाहों को शीशा दिखाना
परिवार पहले है आता
कहाँ से ये गुण समाता

वो मेरी माँ है

भूखे पेट कभी सो लेना
तृप्ति हर दिल में भर देना
गुड़ बर्फी से मीठी पाई
किसने त्याग की रीत बताई

वो मेरी माँ है

छोटों को दुलार करना
बूढों का मनुहार करना
सबका मान है स्वमान से बड़ा
किसने दिखाई सम्मान की विधा

वो मेरी माँ है

सबकी प्रिय हूँ मानी जाती
आदर सबसे निरंतर पाती
मुस्काते , बाधाओं से लड़ना
कहाँ से आई ये प्रेरणा

वो मेरी माँ है

माँ सम कर्मठ हैं कहते मुझको
माँ सी सायानी है कहते मुझको
हूँ आज जो सबकी दुलारी
किससे पाई ये छवि प्यारी

वो मेरी माँ है!