Structure Stricture

There's a Dick In the Pic 😾

(Con)descend your mountain

patronise too the sea

crystallise ur pearls

of sycophancy

In the murky 

depths far

far away

from

me

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I totally get what you're saying about the poetry police, which I try not to be part of! I started at the cafe 5 years ago after a lifelong professional writing career & I had strong ideas about what "good" writing was all about. The younger, fresher writers on this website have taught me a thing or two about losing my "corrective" approach (who cares about grammar & spelling, it's the HEART of a message that matters!) But I can also see this message in a very different way, about politics in the USA, which are so divided. I just don't want to hear that crap from "the other side" (Trump supporters) anymore. I tried to understand them, tolerate them, ignore them . . . but now I'm blocking them! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

PS this poem is superb in terms of making a poignant point!

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I wrote this in sheer ire as a couple of my friends who are new on here are upset because they had stuff pointed out in their poems and given tips they didn't ask for and it demoralized them. So I thought I'll make a point because it's their Art and they deserve to express themselves the way they prefer. I agree with you, my dear friend Margie! Whether poetry police or politically motivated nuisance makers, we must block!
Thank you for appreciating my point! HUGS!

[albee]

this is visual art...philosophical art...social critique art...wordplay with brush and paint taking the audience to a point...point of reflection? point in an argument? a point in the singularity that we all are?
cheers to you for a Wonderfull piece...

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Shapes enhance the underlying message sometimes. Thank you so much for looking at this poem so appreciatingly! Loved your review ❤

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think this shape poem has barbs sticking out of it! The invective is raw and brutal indeed. Effective and filled with conviction Dhara.I have to say there are some who overdo the correcting but I think there is a balance as young writers (and older 'newbies' such as myself) learn only with insight and by taking notice of form and structure of some kind. One thing that I fear insults art is platitudes, don't you think?

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I think so too. I've learnt from some great guys here who let their poetry speak for them. As for platitudes, nothing puts me off more than copy-paste kind of reviews. Its better not to be reviewed at all lol.
Thank a lot, John.

[Lydia Shutter]

I so enjoyed this, Kat. Unfortunately, poetry sites are made up of people from all over the world and they all have their own agendas. I have learned to post poetry for me. I enjoy reading poetry, but I am no longer an English teacher and I don't have to correct anyone. I have never mastered the art of a shape poem. This one is great. Lydi**

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Awww A big thanks Ms. Lydi! Its lovely to see you on this page. That you write poetry for the sheer love of it is the reason why everyone loves reading you! Stay blessed!

[Neville]

........................................ How utterly magnificently and perfectly put :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you my friend 😸

[Neville]

... my pleasure entirely

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

;))))))))))

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Lol! Still scratching with those claws, i see! Another poetry cop! So many of them! Your poem is very poetic yet gets its message across very effectively. I am not a fan of mediocre writing, yet its not my place to point it out to others. Sometimes a simple typo or edit can fix a poem to perfection. Who needs the lecturing?. I love the layout and simplicity of your poem. It hits hard and with poetic grace. So well done, Ms Kat! Keep those claws sharp! :))

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thanks dear Jamila! I love that you appreciate a kitty with her claws all polished and sharpened. Other just kick me and I yowl in pain. I'm so happy to see you on this page. Many happy hugs and kitty purrs dear friend!

[T.S. Ulmus]

What beautiful imagery, that someone would dare condescend the mountains or the sea. Take it to the "murky depths" . I have to say though, I have received some very constructive criticism on this site from some brilliant poetic minds that had a lot to offer. There's a difference between "you used the wrong 'your'" or "have you thought of this rhyme instead because it's saves the cadence" and just "you suck at life". I want realistic honest criticism from a poetic community. To that end, you captured an emotion and a moment perfectly and even did so in a difficult format. Good job.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thanks a lot :)
Constructive criticism is appreciated always! This was more about a loaded review that upset someone. Thank you so much T.S. Ulmus!

[Mr. Malarkey]

Lol okay this is pretty awesome. I write a few "reviews" every night, but honestly they're more like my inner thoughts, points for discussion, and complements instead of actual reviews. Poetry is like an art form and there's not really a standardized definition of "beautiful" because you could ask 30 people and get completely different answers. Poetry is all subjective and every poem is beautiful in it's own unique way, just like art. You could paint me a freaking blue square, put it next to Picasso and Michelangelo, and I'll tell you that all three paintings are wonderful for what they are. I strongly agree with what you said lol. Thanks for sharing!

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you for such a positive reinforcement on this post. Nice to meet you. :)

[Mr. Malarkey]

You're always welcome, and it's nice to meet you too! :)

[John the Baptist]

Well, you certainly put dickhead in his place.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Hopefully, for good. Thanks. :)

[Dripping Chocolate Madn..]

I.
Love.
This.

(but there definitely is no dick in that pic)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I'm thinkin chocolate-coated dicks now hahaha forgive the madness.
Thanks for lovin it. Meeeeooowww.

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

Lololol not the first time I've heard (or done) that. It's ok. All madness is approved.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Yayyyyy! 💃