Mother's Chariot

Mother’s chariot

 

As time sings farewell to the chariot of fire
We realise that mother Earth has made her seasonal tilt, on the bed of space
as time plays a tune of praise to her new white winter coat

 

Mother's voyage around her warm chariot draws even further into void
while her coat becomes warn
and her cold relic of frost turns to art
that showcases her scarcity of omnibenevolence, when time continues to sing

 

But her journey through the void of space does not stop

 

For time plays her a tune of forgiveness, and she turns back towards her loving chariot
welcoming his glory, his warm touch

 

She gives way to her birth of last year’s cycle
and soon her body is painted with new born followers
just beginning their story of life

 

Mother turns,
facing her fiery companion,
and listens to the kings of her empire celebrate the chariots return

 

Her body so full of life, and cheer
But nothing can stay forever
She will reach the point of her familiar trail,
Where she will make her seasonal tilt on the bed of space
and time will sing farewell to the chariot of fire

Author's Note

This is not only my first poem but my contest entry for the "Winter Solstice" contest.

I have always loved nature and it's beautiful expanses, I hope you like this! :3

Reviews

[Kerry O'Connor]

Very nicely done. You have taken a grand theme and worked your extended metaphor with great skill. I loved the lines:
'She gives way to her birth of last year’s cycle
and soon her body is painted with new born followers
just beginning their story of life'

[Sel Whiteley]

A very powerful and well-penned poem. A great way of viewing the changing of the seasons which employs many classic symbols in an engaging manner and very unique and creative. A great poem thanks for sharing.

[Awkward]

New way of viewing the changing of the seasons.

[Cricket Kidd]

nice. I never thought of the seasons changing that way before.

[Desert Dreamer]

A mythical poem of sun and earth, and the song of time. Beautiful and magical.

[Eric Cox]

I liked this much. A creative and cool write.

[Marie Harrison]

Magical nature poem. It's beautiful. Love the imagery and fantasy of this nature poem. Nice.

[+Naomi+]

This was beautiful, extremly. I love how much detail you used and how you compared earth to a mother

[Graceful]

very very good!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Such a wonderfully mystical feel to the poem, an uprising through the ashes... Very nice work.

[Sarah Jane]

This is amazing, I hope you win the contest:) the imagry is fantastic