The Hive Mind

 

The hive mind is made to be broken

 

Each one crippled, every door open

 

Skitter the honey, eat their wings

 

Bash the walls, kill their queen

 

All together, they buzz and sing

 

Thrashing their legs, mad to sting

 

Bring your axes, cut down the tree

 

Down comes the hive, with all of the bees

 

But the hive mind is made to be broken

Reviews

[Akroma]

Hmmm I like this poem, indeed.
Mended to be broken, not broken to be mended...so is the actual order of things. Created to be destroyed.

Nice job on being concise, I saw no fluff.
Favorite line:
"Each one crippled, every door open."

In Respect,
Akroma

[Prodigo]

This, I think, is about destroying the established order and but inevitably, when one ends the other will take control.

[BlueEyedBandit]

I love the chaotic atmosphere in this.

[Neversee]

Tragedy in any context is stunning. You work at refinement, a few words to convey an environment. This is one of my addictions.... How few words can convey enough to move people. Good work Prodigo.

[MoonlitAngel]

Very good display of imagery here. I liked it very much. I could see everything, even with the few lines it was given in. Also, just because I'm weird like this, I like how you made the lines go from out to in to out again. Like, the length of the lines. Sorry.. I'm sure you didn't do that on purpose.. I just really like how poems have cool designs like that.:)

[wolfshrew]

This has some wonderful imagery, I enjoyed this short piece.

[clau]

Loved the rhyme scheme, love the paradox
but i dont seem to get the overall meaning, perhaps because of my poor analytical skills haha

[Adora.xo]

Very original! ^.^ I loved the rhyme scheme too! But in the lines:
"All together, they buzz and sing
Thrashing their legs, mad to sting"

I almost wanted to say if not hear "All together, they buzz and They sing"
I'm not sure though, that is just a personal opinion lol, but with or with out the extra word in it, I think it's a fantastic piece of work. You would definately make Mr. Poe proud =] I like his work also, but I could never do his form of work justice the way you do. Keep up the good work hunn!